Template:Did you know nominations/Child soldiers in the Democratic Republic of Congo
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: rejected by Rcsprinter123 (speak) @ 16:51, 14 May 2014 (UTC)
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Child soldiers in the Democratic Republic of Congo
[edit]- ... that the use of child soldiers in the Democratic Republic of the Congo has been described as endemic?
Created/expanded by Darkness Shines (talk). Self nominated at 14:29, 9 April 2014 (UTC).
New enough, long enough, neutral and well-cited. Hook is succinct and cited. QPQ done.
- Outstanding issues:
1) The title of the article is not bold.2) More pressingly, the lead of the article reads like a series of disjointed facts rather than a narrative or introduction. 3) The body of the article also appears as a description of issues peripheral to the subject without any real core on the subject itself, but this is not as problematic. Perhaps I am nit-picking, but I would be happy to approve this nomination once the first two issues are addressed. Oreo Priest talk 04:25, 23 April 2014 (UTC)
- Outstanding issues:
- @Oreo Priest: How is the article title not bold? It looks the same as any other article title to me. Darkness Shines (talk) 12:15, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
- I meant it isn't in bold in the first sentence. Compare with Theatre Royal, Glasgow (or any other article): "The Theatre Royal is the ..." Sorry for any confusion. Oreo Priest talk 12:45, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
- But the article title is not in the article at all, so how can it be bolded? Darkness Shines (talk) 16:53, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
- I meant it isn't in bold in the first sentence. Compare with Theatre Royal, Glasgow (or any other article): "The Theatre Royal is the ..." Sorry for any confusion. Oreo Priest talk 12:45, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
- Oreo Priest, under the circumstances, I think WP:BOLDTITLE indicates that bolding would not be appropriate here, though I do note that the local term for the child soldiers, "Kadogos", is bolded in the first sentence. I do agree with your comment, though, that the intro section does read like a series of disjointed facts, and should probably be redone. I'd also like to suggest that the original hook's rather bland "has been described" be made more effective by noting that this was a characterization coming from the UN (or a UN Mission); maybe, "has been described in a UN report"? BlueMoonset (talk) 19:56, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
- All good points. I agree with BlueMoonset. Oreo Priest talk 13:27, 7 May 2014 (UTC)
Darkness Shines has just been blocked for two months, and has posted "Done here" on his talk page. Since there haven't been any changes to address the issues in the article, I don't see any alternative but to close this nomination. BlueMoonset (talk) 02:38, 14 May 2014 (UTC)
