Template:Did you know nominations/Castner Range National Monument

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The result was: promoted by Bruxton (talk) 00:23, 2 April 2023 (UTC)

Castner Range National Monument

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Castner Range under snow

... that Castner Range National Monument, a former weapons test site that closed in 1966, is still undergoing remediation so this portion of the Franklin Mountains (pictured) can be used for recreation? Source: https://www.whitehouse.gov/briefing-room/presidential-actions/2023/03/21/a-proclamation-on-the-establishment-of-the-castner-range-national-monument-2023/
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Created by Reywas92 (talk). Self-nominated at 20:46, 25 March 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Castner Range National Monument; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook eligibility:

Cited:
Interesting:
Other problems: - n

Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px.
Freely licensed: Used in article: Clear at 100px:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: The article is very nice and meets all DYK criteria, but I think the hook needs to be changed, because the cause of the protection of the site was not only the plan to turn it into a recreational area. Castner Range is also important for historical and naturalistic reasons, and in my opinion this should appear in the hook. Alex2006 (talk) 08:43, 28 March 2023 (UTC)

- I've changed that to "used for recreation". It does also have historical and natural importance, but the remediation is less relevant to that purpose – it had already been preserved for those. Or what wording would you suggest? Reywas92^Talk 13:35, 28 March 2023 (UTC)
  - Actually, on second thought, you are right. The reasons for protection are different, but the main use will be recreational. Good to go!Alex2006 (talk) 19:45, 30 March 2023 (UTC)

@Reywas92 and Alessandro57: Just a suggestion for a hook. Shortened and geographically labeled. Once I added (pictured) to your hook it was 199 characters and it might be TMI.

ALT1: ... that Castner Range National Monument (pictured) is a former weapons test site in El Paso, Texas and it still needs clean-up of live munitions?

Let me know your thoughts. Bruxton (talk) 14:13, 31 March 2023 (UTC)

Much more concise, @Bruxton:, I like it! The first hook sounded like it was written by me (Italian prolixity :-( ) Alex2006 (talk) 15:20, 31 March 2023 (UTC)

Thanks for the quick response. I will wait to see what Reywas92 thinks Bruxton (talk) 16:31, 31 March 2023 (UTC)

@Bruxton and Alessandro57: I like the original because it shows how long it's been and the purpose of the clean-up. How about

ALT2: ... that to open for recreation, Castner Range National Monument (pictured) in El Paso's Franklin Mountains still needs clean-up of live munitions since closing as a weapons test site in 1966?

That's 186 characters. Reywas92^Talk 00:00, 1 April 2023 (UTC)

Still very long... Maybe we could use ALT1, but remove "former" and add "closed in 1966". Alex2006 (talk) 10:05, 1 April 2023 (UTC)

I am one who thinks that once we get to parsing the hook, it ends up too literal and complete with no reason to read the article. I will go with Reywas92's suggestion because it still leaves me a reason to click the article. Bruxton (talk) 00:21, 2 April 2023 (UTC)