Template:Did you know nominations/Brad Sweet

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The result was: promoted by PumpkinSky talk 16:56, 8 January 2012 (UTC)

Brad Sweet

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... that Brad Sweet will be competing in both NASCAR stock car racing and World of Outlaws sprint car racing in 2012?

Reviewed: 2011 Liberty Bowl

Created/expanded by The Bushranger (talk). Self nom at 02:03, 6 January 2012 (UTC)

Everything checks out - within time limits, just long enough (1518 characters), neutral, sourced, no copyvio. But I would suggest a slight article rewrite to clarify and give it more general interest. The hook fact is in the lede, but unsourced. Later in the article the facts are sourced, but the hook is obscured by jargon. So it isn't obvious to a non-expert. Suggest sourcing lede or rewriting the last para in layman's terms. Fryede (talk) 15:45, 6 January 2012 (UTC)

I've added a bit to the last sentence to clarify - does that help? - The Bushranger _{One ping only} 20:02, 6 January 2012 (UTC)

That works. Fryede (talk) 21:57, 6 January 2012 (UTC)