Template:Did you know nominations/Bizounce

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:03, 14 June 2016 (UTC)

Bizounce

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• ... that J Records promoted Olivia's debut single "Bizounce" for its profane language, emphasizing its use of eleven "fucks", five "shits", and three "niggaz"?

• ALT1: ... that Olivia's debut single "Bizounce" was described as giving a "steely boot to a crap lover" in the style of TLC, Kelis, and Eve?

Created/expanded by Aoba47 (talk). Self-nominated at 01:14, 30 May 2016 (UTC).

• Reviewed: Six-banded armadillo

• I have not done a full review, but I do prefer ALT1. Neutrality^talk 17:41, 31 May 2016 (UTC)

• Thank you! I put ALT1 as it was more unique to the specific song than my original idea for the hook (an argument can be made that many songs are marketed or promoted for profane lyrics). I agree with you that ALT1 is the better choice of the two. Aoba47 (talk) 20:04, 31 May 2016 (UTC)

• Full review needed now that hook is set. BlueMoonset (talk) 03:29, 5 June 2016 (UTC)

  Promoted to GA status on May 30, the article is neutrally written with inline citations. No close paraphrasing detected, and QPQ is done. The source for the hook says "Olivia's 'Bizounce' is, well, great, administering a steely boot to a crap lover in the tradition of TLC, Kelis, Eve et al. Olivia's twist, however, is to present a vicious kiss-off as a boudoir come-on." It sounds like the "boudoir come-on" part was unique to Olivia, and not like the other artists. The hook may need to be tweaked a little. Random86 (talk) 01:48, 11 June 2016 (UTC)

  Thank you for your comment. I have tweaked the hook to better reflect the article and have change the use of the source in the article to better reflect it. Let me know if anything else needs to be done. Aoba47 (talk) 02:54, 11 June 2016 (UTC)

  Everything is good now. I changed "for" to "as" in the hook. Random86 (talk) 03:13, 11 June 2016 (UTC)