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The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 17:14, 5 December 2012 (UTC)

Ah Boys to Men

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Created/expanded by Bonkers The Clown (talk). Self nom at 05:22, 17 November 2012 (UTC)

  • I am concerned that some of the phrasing used in this article is too close to that of its sources. Compare for example "explores the many perennial issues that recruits and their kins face while in Basic Military Training" with "exploration of the many perennial issues recruits and their loved ones face while in BMT", or "Neo still insisted on shooting them because he wanted to give the audience a new experience" with "he insisted on shooting these scenes despite the cost, because he believed it will give audiences "a new experience"". Nikkimaria (talk) 15:44, 1 December 2012 (UTC)
  • I have duly noted your "concerns" by making the appropriate changes. It's now fixed. Thank you and may you take a look again. Bonkers The Clown (Nonsensical Babble) 09:51, 2 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for your efforts so far, but additional work is needed on this point - for example, "the special effects-heavy battle sequences" and "which involved real weapons, pyrotechnics and numerous extras" are both direct quotes from the source, while "Discussions are also reportedly going on with Hong Kong distributors" is nearly the same as "Discussions are going on with Hong Kong distributors". Needs to be thoroughly checked. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:10, 2 December 2012 (UTC)
  • I have duly noted your concerns by making the appropriate changes. It's now fixed. Thank you and may you take a look again. Bonkers The Clown (Nonsensical Babble) 11:47, 3 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Better. The article in general could use a good copy-editing, though. Nikkimaria (talk) 03:42, 5 December 2012 (UTC)
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