Talk:Ziana Zain/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: BelovedFreak 22:46, 15 August 2010 (UTC) Unfortunately this article has a long way to go before meeting the GA criteria.

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• There are problems with the manual of style, such as incorrect use of bold text in the lead (only the subject's names should be bold)
• Violations of the Neutral point of view policy, for example: "Ziana emerged as a sensational star", "Her powerful voice and adorable personality"
• Incorrect grammar and punctuation (for example capital letters in the middle of sentences)
• Poor prose throughout (eg. "Ziana emerged as a sensational star after she was discovered by a popular music director, Rahim Othman when the first time he saw her sang with Royal Malaysian Police (PDRM).")
• There are links to disambiguation pages (Avon and RIM)
• There are several dead links (some of which are listed at [1])
• If "prodarktion" is not an official Youtube channel, then the article is probably linking to copyright violations, which is not allowed
• I'm unsure of the reliability of some of the sources used (eg. VanityShack, Celebrity Pujaanku, filemkita.com)

I'm a little concerned that the nominator doesn't appear to have edited the article recently, so I'm not sure how invested they are in improving the article. Anyway, my suggestions are:

1. Review the Good Article criteria
2. Tone down the overly positive language
3. Get a thorough copyedit from a native (or professional standard) English-speaker, preferably one who's not already involved in the article
4. Examine the references used to make sure that they all meet WP:RS
5. Request a peer review.

Please let me know if you have any questions.--BelovedFreak 22:46, 15 August 2010 (UTC)