Talk:Zahava Burack/GA1

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 03:20, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Looking at this one. —Ed!^(talk) 03:20, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

General

Dup links, dab links, copyvio and link check reviews all return no problems.
Reference spotchecks Ref #1, Ref #6 and Ref #9 all reflect information shown in article.
Are you certain no infobox is needed?

Surviving the Holocaust

Any chance there's info on her parents occupations? Or any sense for how old the siblings are?
"...than 5 feet wide, 7 feet long, and 20 inches deep." Please use the {{convert}} template for our friends on the metric system.
Consistency needed on period usage: "relocation". vs sardines."

Liberarion and move to Israel

"The Razdas eventually lost track of the Macugowskis." - reference needed.

Activism

"where she would marry her husband, Robert H. Burack" - It's implied that she'd marry her husband. Any idea of his occupation or how they met?
Repeated twice in this section: "Robert passed away in 1988."
"and used her wealth philanthropically" -- Is it explained where she accrued this wealth?
Disambiguation needed: "to further Jewish, Israeli, and Democratic causes" -- the Democratic Party or democracy in general?
"defeated by the incumbent, John L. Messina," -- His party needs mention here.
Any mention of children?
Where was she buried?

References

Consistency needed in dates. I see several different formats between "1996-04-06"; "8 November 1986"; "Nov 14, 1986" which should be standardized.
Ref 1: Author name needed.
Ref 3: Publication date and author name needed.
Ref 4: Publication date and location needed.
Ref 7: Looks like a book. Either an ISBN or an OCLC number is needed for the edition used.
Ref 8: Publisher info needed.
Ref 11: Access date needed as well as edition of Senate archive.
Ref 13 is a book. Publisher, location published and year published needs inclusion.

Hi Ed!

Thanks for your review comments. I apologize for not responding sooner; I've been a little busy IRL. I'll start reviewing my sources (probably later today or tomorrow) to see if any of the info you've requested is available. Some of it may not be, particularly about her husband and child(ren) - at the time I wrote the article I spent about four hours looking for a reliable source just to say who she was married to, and the best I got was a legal case where he was named as a party. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 21:47, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox: I don't have a strong opinion either way, I just didn't put one in. No particular reason. If you really think there should be one, I'll add one.

Surviving the Holocaust: Dad's occupation has been added, can't find info about mom's. Conversion template added, periods now consistent.

I'm hesitant to include the sisters' ages, because they're inconsistent between sources (as is Zahava's actually). One source [1] states that "Zahava and her cousin were 7. Miriam was 9, Sarah 6". Another source [2] gives Zahava as 9, but says Miriam was 5 and Sarah was 10. It's all over the joint, not even consistent on their birth order.

The only relatively reliable thing I can find is that it's pretty clear from the NYT obit that Zahava was 68 when she died, meaning she was born in 1933 not 1936 (and would have been 9 or 10 when her ordeal started, not 7). But I haven't found any similar info on the sisters, yet. I could include a line about "sources unclear about their ages", but I don't know if that's relevant.

Liberation: Added ref.

Activism: cleaned up redundancy about marrying her husband. No clue how they met. He seems to have worked for his father's plumbing supply company until getting fired in late 1979 [3] but no sources available (reliable or otherwise) that says what he did after.

Unfortunately I have no idea what she did to get wealthy - my guess is that she was a society wife who did fundraising and political work and was otherwise supported by her husband. Per the NYT obit, she worked for the Israeli consulate when she first came to the US, but I haven't found any indication of what she did after. She might've kept doing similar work, but I have no way to confirm that. According to [4] she was the chair of Palm Beach Israel Bonds when she died, but I have no way of knowing if that was a paid position or more philanthropy.

Disambiguation done, incumbent party added.

I found a reliable source about her son in an obit that I hadn't realized I had, so I've also added that in. It's just his name and confirmation that he was her son, no age or DOB. Can't find a reliable source as to her place of burial. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 23:24, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Pinging @Ed!: just to have a look at the changes. I'm reviewing and updating the citations now. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 23:24, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Citations are updated as well. I couldn't find what you call the "edition of Senate archive" (and neither could anyone that I asked on IRC), but I added that it was the 207th session, which I hope suffices. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 01:03, 31 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

This looks good. I would suggest an infobox myself as it tends to be the place people get for the summary of what's in the article, but it's your call. Either way, passing GA. —Ed!^(talk) 02:09, 2 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]