Talk:Zaharije Ostojić/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 21:30, 1 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead: Immediately following the name, the dates of birth and death, if known, should be included.

have added month of death, and am adding some more re his death.

The lead should summarize the entire article. This lead needs to be expanded.

I've had a crack at it, let me know what you think?

A pretty substantial expansion is needed of his pre-World War II life. You have a date of birth, it needs to be sourced. In order for this to be a complete biography, it should include what can be found about his family and early life.

PRODUCER has looked for sources in Serbo-Croat for this bloke, and there isn't much at all. There is now an early life section with his place and year of birth, but we don't even have a year for him joining the Yugoslav Air Force. I managed to find a reference to a notable brother-in-law, but there really is no other coverage available on his family or early life.

The article is seriously lacking context. The infobox states his allegiance as the Chetniks, an anti-Axis organization, simultaneously to Nazi Germany. Which force was he loyal to, and explain a little about that force's allegiance in the war.

I have removed the allegiance to the Germans and Italians as he personally didn't negotiate any agreements with either, although forces under his command fought alongside the Italians during Case White. I have added more context, let me know what you think?

All of the details in the infobox need to be either sourced or included in the prose and sourced there.

Done, I haven't been able to find his start date with the Air Force, so I've just left it as the WWII year range.

"The conference was dominated by Đurišić and its resolutions expressed extremism and intolerance..." this is non-neutral language. You need to clarify who considers the resolutions to be extreme or intolerant.

Have added quote and inline citation from Pavlowitch. I think it is consistent with other reliable sources, but I'm happy to use in-text attribution if you feel it's necessary.

"pull the Chetniks back towards positions on the line of the Drina-Piva rivers, some 80–90 kilometres southwest of Jablanica." -- You'll need a convert template for all units of measurement.

Done.

Operation Weiss section mentions a "Colonel Bailey" who needs a first name.

Done.

1943-44 section mentions a "Colonel McDowell" who also needs a first name.

Done.

Duplicate links tool returns one result: Drina

Fixed.

External links and disambiguation links tools return no problems. One image to illustrate the article which has a Fair Use rationale.
No apparent stability or neutrality problems present.
"Pavlowitch (2008)" -- This reference doesn't point to anything in the bibliography. It looks like you may have put in the wrong book, as the Pavlowitch (2007) reference points to no refs.

perennial problem, too many editions, I've aligned them with my 2008 copy.

Placing the article on hold pending some pretty substantial improvements. —Ed!^(talk) 23:45, 1 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Ed. Have made some substantial changes to address your observations. Let me know if any of your comments haven't been addressed. Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 11:51, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I re-read the article, and the information you added was extremely helpful in establishing a little more context. The only other thing I would suggest: generally, one-paragraph sections are frowned upon (such as "Early life" and "Plans for the "march on Bosnia"") So I would suggest you combine or expand some of those sections. But I won't hold it for GA based solely on that, so I'm passing the article. Good work. —Ed!^(talk) 13:10, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, Ed. Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 13:52, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]