Talk:You Don't Know Anything/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 13:25, 13 April 2016 (UTC)
Hi there! I'm Cartoon network freak and here's my complete review for your GA nomination:
- Lead
- link 'American' to Americans
Done
- The single was released -> It's the second time in a row that you use the word 'released'. Reword the sentence to "The single was made available for digital download."
Done
- song, influenced by -> song, also incorporating
Done
- Lyrically the song -> Lyrically, the track
Done
- "in the wrong" -> this doesn't make any sense.
Done
- "This Is the Day", it -> "This Is the Day", "You Don't Know Anything"
Done
- The track received -> It's the second time in a row you use 'track'; try 'recording'.
Done
- music critics who compared it to the works of My Bloody Valentine.-> music critics. It drew as well comparations to the works of My Bloody Valentine.
Done
- Infobox
- For the recording places, change the style to the style used in Dance (Alexandra Stan song).
Not done This doesn't need to be changed as it is worded like this in several other GA articles
- Background and composition
- Andy Chase; production -> Andy Chase. The production
Done
- Musically, the track is pop -> Musically, the song is a pop
Done
- record, that is heavy on guitars. -> recording, incorporating guitar sounds.
Done
- after "This Is the Day" -> after the latter track
Done
- exclusively in -> exclusively to
Done
- remove 'heavily'
Done
- their description -> their review
Done
- drums,"[4] while -> drums",[4] while
Done
- Jack Rabid, writing for AllMusic, -> AllMusic writer Jack Rabid
Done
- also compared it to the works of "MBV". -> drew comparations to the works of MBV.
Done
- "Ivy have an -> Ivy "have an
Done
- Critical reception
- Unlink 'music critics'
Done
- also enjoyed the track -> also enjoyed the recording
Done
- stand out";[4] while -> stand out",[4] while
Done
- declared the song -> named the song
Done
- Remove the 'However'.
Done
- unremarkably."[7] -> unremarkably".[7]
Done
- Credits and personnel
- Place the 'Credits and personnel adapted from "You Don't Know Anything" liner notes[8] and Andy Chase's discography.[9]' atop the topic, like there's done in Dance (Alexandra Stan song) + [8] and [9] should be both at the end of the clause.
Done
- Change 'Managment' to 'Recording'
Done
- Replace the semicolons in the following text with normal commas.
Not done While listing items/objects that already include commas, it is correct to use semicolons to separate the information so the reader is not confused
- The Place, New York City; Duotone Studios, New York City; and Compositions, New York City -> The Place, Duotone Studios and Compositions in New York City.
- I mention what I did here in the previous comment
- Josh Grier - legal -> ?? What does 'legal' have to stand for ??
Done
- Release history
- Unlink both Atlantic Records and CD single.
Done
- References
- Ref #3 : "ivy - Discography" -> Ivy discography; thebandivy -> The Band Ivy
Done
- Ref #4 : "Ivy – Apartment Life" -> Ivy – Apartment Life (album review)
Done
- Ref #8 : Change the style for the liner notes to that one used in Dance (Alexandra Stan song)
Done
- Ref #9 : andychase.com -> Andy Chase
Done
- Outcome: I put this on hold, so I give you 7 days time to solve this comments. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:25, 13 April 2016 (UTC)
- @Cartoon network freak: I fixed all of your recommended changes; feel free to re-review it when you get a chance! Thanks! Carbrera (talk) 23:44, 13 April 2016 (UTC)
- @Carbrera: Well done. Passed the article after I changed some things you forgot to edit. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:56, 14 April 2016 (UTC)