Talk:You're Not the One/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: WikiRedactor (talk · contribs) 22:23, 1 May 2014 (UTC)
I'm more than happy to return the favor and review this GAN, my full review will be here shortly! WikiRedactor (talk) 22:24, 1 May 2014 (UTC)
- Toolbox
- Three disambiguation links to correct
Done
- Infobox and Introduction
- I would suggest removing the small text for "Los Angeles, California" (I've been trying to limit my use of it lately!)
- Done
- I also recommend California, because the link for Los Angeles is enough and I don't think the state is needed in this case.
Done
- Please replace the semi-colon with a comma in the final sentence of the second paragraph.
Done
- Background
- "at a time where—according to her—Ferreira" should read "at a time where—according to Ferreira—she".
Done
- Can you replace basically with something a little more formal like "essentially", "largely", etc.?
Done
- Composition
- "Nourish" sounds more like food to me, maybe "express" would be better here?
Done
- Can you insert a {{clear}} template to keep the section from bumping into the heading for the next section?
Done
- Critical reception
- I would start the paragraph with a brief mention that the reviews were generally favorable.
Done
- For the AllMusic review, you should restate that the album you are referring to is Night Time, My Time.
Done
- I would specifically mention the author of the Time reference for the year-end mention.
Done
- Music video
- Instead of "advanced", I think "announced" would be a better word to use.
Done but slightly different; I had already used 'announced' in that sentence.
- Live performances
- When talking about the Bangerz Tour, you can just say "American" instead of "the United States".
Done
- Credits and personnel
- Night Time, My Time should be italicized.
Done
- Spot-checking
- Reference 28 (Idolator) needs the link in the citation.
Done
- Reference 29 (New York Local) needs the link in the citation.
Done
- The article is in good shape, and after these comments are addressed, I will be happy to pass the article. WikiRedactor (talk) 16:40, 2 May 2014 (UTC)
- @WikiRedactor: I think everything's fine now! :) prism△ 17:19, 2 May 2014 (UTC)
- Passing, good work! WikiRedactor (talk) 17:26, 2 May 2014 (UTC)
- @WikiRedactor: I think everything's fine now! :) prism△ 17:19, 2 May 2014 (UTC)
- Non-reviewer comment
- Article definitely needs to contain reviews of the song. XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 07:48, 2 May 2014 (UTC)
@XXSNUGGUMSXX: Check now! :) (I had accidentally reverted the article's new version. prism△ 15:22, 2 May 2014 (UTC)
- I thought something was wrong :P. Otherwise, I would've said it needs massive expansion. Good luck in the review! XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 15:43, 2 May 2014 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.