Talk:Yoga pants/GA2
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 19:52, 20 February 2020 (UTC)
I'll take this review. I'll note the concerns raised in the previous review, but I don't agree with all of them or think the quick fail was warranted. Hog Farm (talk) 19:52, 20 February 2020 (UTC)
- Many thanks, I'll get to this very shortly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:33, 21 February 2020 (UTC)
Comments
[edit]Would it be appropriate to add a couple sentences explaining the origins of yoga before stating that it became popular in the West in the '90s?
- Good idea. Done.
You link to the wrong Strauss article in the origins section, I'm assuming you meant to link to the company (which has a an independent article) rather than the 19th-century founder.
- Linked to the company.
What is an "unfamiliar brand"? It's the terminology used by the source, but can you provide some context for what the source is referring to?
- Said "less well-known". Of course it means a name nobody ever heard of, sewn into the waistband in a sweatshop somewhere well out of sight.
Usage Whats "the high street"? I'm assuming this is a BE variant, but I'm not such what the equivalent in other forms of English would be.
- Wikilinked. The American would be "main street"; the meaning is "the street in your town where the shops are", but of course that might not exist any more, so the truth might be A**z*n or a shopping mall 20 minutes out of town.
In the lead, you single out the sales figure for the athleisure segment as a whole, it would be more on topic to use one specifically for yoga pants if available.
- Found a more specific figure for yoga clothing at least, new ref.
Social issues - "similar complaints caused a ban in Rockport, Massachusetts, quickly reversed" - Not the best way to phrase this. " [...] caused a ban [...] that was quickly reversed" would be better if that was the meaning you intended.
- Done.
Can we get accessdate parameters for all of the websites cited?
- Done.
Is reference #26, "Yogi Goals", a RS?
- Removed.
The last image, the Gingerbread-print yoga pants image, is tagged as "Own work", but looks to me like suspisciously close to a staged photo shoot, which would likely not be taggable as "Own work". What do you think?
- Removed.
The last sentence of Types is very similar to a sentence at [1]. You didn't use this as a source, so the book probably used one of the same sources you did. This would still need a bit of rephrasing to make it less similar, though.
- The book has copied from the article; its whole coverage of yoga pants is identical to a chunk of the article version of 29 January 2018, just before the e-book's publication date of 9 February 2018.
That's it for the GA review. Hog Farm (talk) 01:55, 21 February 2020 (UTC)
Passing for GA, all concerns addressed. Hog Farm (talk) 13:58, 21 February 2020 (UTC)