Talk:Yoga for women/GA1
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Reviewer: MX (talk · contribs) 05:08, 30 January 2020 (UTC)
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[edit]Will review. Stay put! Sorry for the long wait. MX (✉ • ✎) 05:08, 30 January 2020 (UTC)
- Many thanks, and yes, some of my yoga GANs have been waiting a while. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:32, 30 January 2020 (UTC)
A gendered activity
[edit]- Geeta Iyengar notes that women - Who is this person? A short intro like "Yoga author and teacher Geeta ..." would be nice.
- Done.
- James Mallinson states that the Gorakhnati yoga - Same here I guess. James for all I know can be a guy who does yoga near my house.
- Done.
- James Mallinson states that the Gorakhnati yoga - Ditto
- Done that already, maybe you meant Pingatore? I glossed her too just in case, and Krishnamacharya too. I think just about everybody is now either explicitly glossed or introduced in a context which makes clear what they are.
- Kimberley J. Pingatore similarly notes that yoga practitioners in America are predominantly female, young, affluent, fit, and white. - Trying to find a policy but couldn't. Why use "America" when "United States" is more exact. I could only find MOS:US but maybe you can find something else. I would use United States for this case.
- Done.
- In America in 2004, 77 per cent of yoga practitioners were women; - Feel free to abbreviate to U.S. or US
- Done.
- The imbalance may be increasing: Yoga Journal's survey in 1997 found that a little over 80 percent of readers were female; in 2003, the journal's advertising page reported 89 percent female readership. - These figures are great, but they are around 20 years old. We can keep these as historical, but do we have more recent data?
- Not that I've seen, and I've had quite a thorough nose around.
History
[edit]- Further information: Yoga in America - The name of the article is actually Yoga in the United States, so I guess we can change "America" for "United States" here too.
- Done, worse luck. America was better. Why use one word when three will do.
- claiming that not only were the rajah and the rani in perfect health - Rani links to a subcontinent. Is this some sort of title or person? I'm confused.
- Ah, there's a mess at Rajah/Rani (King/Queen). Removed the link and added a gloss.
- Krishnamacharya to begin teaching yoga in China - Just an idea, but why not like Yoga in China per WP:REDLINK.
- Well we could but I'm not going there any time soon.
- On her return to America in 1947, - Change to "U.S." or "US"
- Sorted.
- Marcia Moore studied yoga in Calcutta in the 1950s - Link Calcutta here and remove the other one found later
- Done.
- Yoga Vedanta Centre in Boston in 1962 - Link Boston for our international readers
- I'm a Brit, so that'll be Boston, Lincolnshire, right? ... only kidding.
- spreading asana-based yoga in America - Change America
- Done.
- practising yoga in Britain rose from about 5000 in 1967 to 50,000 - 5,000 (requires comma)
- Done.
Notes
[edit]- In British usage, the middle class is relatively comfortable, above the working class, well-educated with good jobs. - I don't think "good" is the right word here. Maybe "high-paying" or "white-collar"? Something like that.
- Done.
Comprehensiveness
[edit]- The article reads well and covers women's role in yoga quite well. However, it only seems to be focused in certain parts of the world. What about Africa, or maybe other parts of Europe (you only covered UK), perhaps Latin America?
- Many thanks. I've done my best, with a whole shelf of books at my disposal. The truth is that very little has been written about yoga for women in many parts of the world. I've searched in English, French, German, Swedish, and Italian. It's possible that searches in Spanish (not my forte) would find a little more but I think we're quite close to the "big picture" here really. Your characterisation of coverage equates quite well to "covers the main points" which is the GA criterion.
- Fair enough. I actually tried looking too in Spanish but only found general information about yoga in Latin America; nothing in specific about women. MX (✉ • ✎) 19:24, 30 January 2020 (UTC)
- Many thanks. I've done my best, with a whole shelf of books at my disposal. The truth is that very little has been written about yoga for women in many parts of the world. I've searched in English, French, German, Swedish, and Italian. It's possible that searches in Spanish (not my forte) would find a little more but I think we're quite close to the "big picture" here really. Your characterisation of coverage equates quite well to "covers the main points" which is the GA criterion.