Talk:Ye (album)/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 15:47, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Sure, let's review this.

"Guest vocals from PartyNextDoor, Ty Dolla Sign, Kid Cudi, Jeremih and 070 Shake, among others, are included on Ye." - add comma after Jeremih (see oxford comma). Other examples:

" including Lil Yachty, Big Sean and Tyler, the Creator." - similar after "Big Sean" (especially because the comma is in Tyler, the Creator's name)
"produced, produced and provided guest vocals" Done

"West handled the production in its entirety, with additional production by Mike Dean, who serves as a co-executive producer, as well as others. " - why not just say "West produced the album with Mike Dean"? The "handled the production in its entirety" feels like it's about Kanye doing it all (and "handle" is vague anyway), but it's misleading given the rest of the sentence Done with changes
"Succeeding the release of Pusha T's Daytona, the album is the second of five seven-track albums produced by West in what have been referred to as the "Wyoming Sessions", and set to be released weekly. It preceded the release of West's collaborative album with Kid Cudi, as Kids See Ghosts, titled Kids See Ghosts, Nas' Nasir, and Teyana Taylor's K.T.S.E.. " - this is a bit confusing and a bit of a run-on. I suggest it be split up into additional sentences, or just simplified a bit Done
"Ye became West's record-equalling eighth consecutive album to debut at number one on the US Billboard 200." - bolded part is confusing
Do you want me to reword record-equalling or mention that he tied Eminem's record?
Yea, I guess I'm just used to reading it as "record-tying". I'd mention that he tied Eminem's record, yea. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 23:53, 18 April 2020 (UTC) Done with changes[reply]
Link Calabasas? Done
"The meeting occurred at West's office in Calabasas, following on from him recording in Wyoming, having bought a property named Monster Lake Ranch for recording and renamed it West Lake Ranch." - was the property in California or Wyoming? Done
"West returned to Wyoming in May 2018 for the recording of then-upcoming albums." - I suggest you add something like, "...which were later referred as the Wyoming Sessions" here. It's at the start of the paragraph when you start explaining the series, and you never really say who called it the "Wyoming Sessions", but it feels like a natural addition here Done
"Prior to referencing mental health on the album, West had mentioned it within his music in the past, especially on The Life of Pablo" - shouldn't this go under "themes and lyrics"? Not done I placed it here as well as including similar info in themes and lyrics due to a discussion on Talk:Kids See Ghosts (album)/GA1
"On June 4, 2018, West's wife Kim Kardashian reconfirmed this and revealed that two weeks were spent recording Ye." - should that be "re-recording"? Done
"The following day" - I suggest merging this paragraph with the previous one, if you're going to start by referencing a date in the previous paragraph. It's helpful to the reader for the flow/sequence Done
"Lucy Jones of The Daily Telegraph noted certain works as being reminiscent of West's third studio album Graduation (2007), viewing the piano chords and Slick Rick sample on the track "No Mistakes" as "old-school West," while also stating that certain vocals on "Ghost Town" are old school West" - if you're going to say "old school West" twice, I suggest reordering it so you don't have to. I suggest something like - "...viewing the piano chords and Slick Rick sample on the track "No Mistakes", and certain vocals on "Ghost Town", as "old school West" Done
""No Mistakes" includes a series of self-righteous outbursts, coming from the perspective of a self-made millionaire in West." - not having ever heard the song, I'm not sure what the "self-made millionaire in West" part means Done
"However, West's previous two albums Yeezus and The Life of Pablo were heavily bootlegged" - as vinyls? Done
There's probably not much on it, but it strikes me as interesting that the album cover image was taken the day before the album was released. Did that cause any issues that the image was so delayed? Or because everything is digital now, I'm just reading too much into that?
Probably the latter
"The soundtrack album denied West a number one album on his own birthday and prevented him from topping the chart for the third time in his career." - the birthday bit is a neat addition. Nothing wrong here

All in all it's a good read. Good description going from Kanye's breakdown on his tour, through the recording process, and through the charting history of the album. I hope my comments aren't too problematic, nothing seemed like it would be too difficult to fix. Let me know if you have any questions. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:47, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hurricanehink: Thanks, initial round of response and I'll get to the rest soon! --Kyle Peake (talk) 16:47, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hurricanehink: Could you reply to my questions? --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:47, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much for the quick replies! My last quibble is about the "record-equalling" (which I think has one too many l's, but again, "tying" is probably more common/better). ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 23:53, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hurricanehink: Thank you for taking the time to review this, I have responded to everything. Just one question; should the critical overview say generally favourable or generally positive? --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:09, 19 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I think your usage of "favorable" is fine, since it's a US-based musician. Happy to pass the article! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:13, 19 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]