Talk:Yasir Akhtar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Larry Hockett (talk · contribs) 08:42, 26 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I will be happy to review this. I notice that the nominator and another contributor have been indefinitely blocked. I will post some initial feedback; if another editor responds to the feedback within a few days, we can continue the review. If there is no response in a few days, we will close this nomination. The article can always be nominated again later once an editor is prepared to address the resulting feedback. Larry Hockett (Talk) 08:42, 26 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

The lead section is far too short. It should summarize the contents of the body of the article. See WP:LEAD.
In the infobox, there is an unnecessary reference at the top. We don't need a reference for his name.
We do need a reference for the date of birth, and I don't see one.
I don't see how reference 2 (reviewit.pk) meets WP:RS (blog-style, user-generated content).
The URL for reference 3 (one of the BBC references) doesn't lead to the correct place anymore. Check the other references for this issue.
There is incorrect use of italics here and later in the article; this makes the entry hard to read. See MOS:ITALICS. For example, the names of people and companies generally should not be placed in italics.

Early life

This section is out of sequence. You mention the place of birth, family, college graduation, more family, then back to childhood.
There is a citation needed tag in this section.

I think I will stop there and await an initial response. Thanks. Larry Hockett (Talk) 09:07, 26 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

This nomination should be summarily rejected. Dtt1 was blocked for undisclosed paid advocacy, which casts into doubt all material that was added. MER-C 20:16, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

You're right. I'm going to close this. Larry Hockett (Talk) 08:15, 9 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]