Talk:X-Men Legends/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs(talk) 18:12, 19 September 2010 (UTC)
- Well, crud. I forgot about this and now have misplaced my notes. I'm travelling, so I won't be able to post anything for another day or so... sorry for the delay, please bear with me. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs(talk) 20:10, 26 September 2010 (UTC)
- Not a problem - we all get busy sometimes. --Teancum (talk) 00:19, 27 September 2010 (UTC)
- Images:
- File:Xmenlegends newxmen.png fails NFCC. Depiction of costumes only isn't really a compelling rationale.
- File:Xmenlegends newxmen.png fails NFCC. Depiction of costumes only isn't really a compelling rationale.
- Prose:
- Elements from the lead (who Alison Crestmere is, who the X-Men are, et al) are somewhat explained in the lead but not in the body. Per policy, everything in the lead must be in the article body.
- There's a lot of confusing verb tenses throughout. Past tense is simple and straightforward; no reason to deviate from that in historical sections unless necessary. You can see some of the problems that I removed in one section.[1]
- The Article needs an audit for accessibility to non-gamers. Terms like "drop in, drop out" are undefined; comparisons that would mean little to non-players leave the prose cloudy, such as "Co-operative play is similar to Baldur's Gate: Dark Alliance 2"."
- Why is "Man of Action" italicized? It's not a work. Actual works, like the X-Men films, The Wonder Years, and Ultimate X-Men, are not italicized.
- " IGN stated "To capture the 'comic book feel,' "... - publications aren't people and don't have opinions, it's the critics who do.
- You can cut down a lot of redundant words throughout the article ("As Alison trains, the X-Men
are sent toexplore an Alaskan research facility", et al.)
- Elements from the lead (who Alison Crestmere is, who the X-Men are, et al) are somewhat explained in the lead but not in the body. Per policy, everything in the lead must be in the article body.
I am putting the article on hold for now. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs(talk) 20:39, 1 October 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. I think I'm going to withdraw the nomination, though. The last time I took this to peer review the responses were extremely minimal, so though I can fix some of these things, I don't feel like alone I can correct the second, third, and last prose issues found without peer participation. Truthfully at the moment I'm happy with it being B class, so perhaps I'll shift focus to a new article. --Teancum (talk) 20:56, 1 October 2010 (UTC)