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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:09, 9 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Shall review for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 09:09, 9 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead

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  • The percentage symbol should be spelt out per MOS:PERCENT
  • Done.
  • "which organises the professional Snooker" - the word in bold does not need to begin with a capital letter
  • Done.
  • "and English billiards through World Billiards" - a full stop is missing to end this sentence
  • Done.

Overview

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  • "The governing body for the non-professional games" - aspect of snooker
  • amended to "aspect of snooker and billiards" (could delete the "and billiards" though)
  • "Barry Hearn's Matchroom Sport owns 51% of World Snooker, and the WPBSA is the next largest shareholder with 26%." - the two sources attached to this do not mention shareholders. ANother source is needed for this particular claim
  • Reworded more in line with the archive for source 4.
  • Also, another violation of MOS:PERCENT in the sentence above
    Amended.
  • "In January 2020, World Snooker rebranded as World Snooker Tour." - World Snooker was rebranded
    Amended.
  • When was Archer president of the WPBSA?
  • Added.

History

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  • "rather than the challenge system that had been in place from 1964[20] and in" - there is a comma missing inbetween "1964" and the citation
  • Done.
  • "The PBPA disaffiliated from the BA&CC from 1 October 1970[22] and was renamed the WPBSA" - a comma is missing between "1970" and the citation
  • Done.

Promotional activities

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  • "a major growth area for the sport[25] and in other territories including Germany." - a comma is between inbetween "sport" and the citation
  • Done.
  • "Amnesty International criticised the announcement, due to concerns about the human rights in the country." - the word in bold isn't needed
  • Done.
  • "and 2013 it initiated the "Cue Zone into Schools" programme," - and in 2013 initiated
  • Done.
  • "the WPBSA announced the creation of an All-party parliamentary group for Snooker," - the words in bold don't need to begin with a capital letter
  • Done.
  • Explain who Conor Burns is to the uninitated
  • Amended; let me know if it needs further change.
  • Change made is acceptable. 17:08, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

Criticism and controversy

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  • "The body has received criticism in the late 2000s." - the word in bold is not needed
  • Amended.
  • "John Higgins has been particularly vocal in his opinion that World Snooker has not done enough to promote the game in new territories," - the words in bold need to be replaced by their past tense equalivents
  • Amended.

References

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  • Reference 10 is dead
  • Archive now added.
  • Reference 17 should link to [1]
  • Done.
  • Reference 42 is missing the author
  • Done.
  • Reference 43 is missing the publisher
  • Done. (Also added agency)
  • Reference 44 will need to be reformatted
  • Changed the content here, with a new reference.
  • Reference 46 is dead and needs archiving
  • IABot seems to have worked a lot better today than when I tried in July, looks like this and a couple of others now link to archived copies.

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to respond or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 11:35, 9 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for your review, MWright96. I've tried to address all of your points, as noted above, but let me know about anything else that needs to be done. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:18, 9 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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