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Can see you've put a lot of work into this but they are a few improvements that I can see need making and will point them out today. --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:41, 23 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
""With You" is a song by American singer and songwriter Mariah Carey. On October 4, 2018, Epic Records released it as the lead single from Carey's fifteenth studio album Caution (2018)." → ""With You" is a song by American singer and songwriter Mariah Carey from her fifteenth studio album, Caution (2018). On October 4, 2018, Epic Records released it as the album's lead single."
""With You" was written by" → "The song was written by"
Change writing order to same as infobox
"also producing the song" → "also producing it"
"was announced on October 2, 2018" → "was announced on October 2" as we already know it's 2018
""With You" is about a woman" → "The song's lyrics center around a woman"
"The song charted at number eight" → ""With You" charted at number eight"
Don't think a Sales chart is notable for the lead, maybe adult contemporary instead?
WikiLink Hungary Single Top 40 to the appropriate target
"The music video, directed" → "The accompanying music video, directed"
"was performed live for the first time at the American" → "was performed live at the American"
"which included number 7" → "including number seven"
Always put the title in ""
Add ref at the end of the first para's last sentence
"the song also charted" → "the song reached"
"chart, and at number 30 on Spain's Physical/Digital chart." → "chart and number 30 on Spain's Physical/Digital chart respectively."
"was number 8 in Hungary" → "was number 8 on the Hungary Single Top 40"
"It was her most successful single there since "I Want To Know What Love Is" (2009).[15]" → "It was Carey's most successful single in Hungary since "I Want To Know What Love Is" in 2009."
"The music video for" → "The accompanying music video for"
"prior to its premiere" → "prior to the premiere"
"The video is in black and white" → "The video is set in black and white"
"It features the singer" → "It includes the singer"
"such as a balcony, a beach, the floor of a mansion, driving around..." → "such as a balcony, a beach and the floor of a mansion; she is also seen driving around..."
"includes a faux fur coat as well as sunglasses" → "consists of a faux fur coat and sunglasses"
"She wore a hot pink gown, and" → "During the performance, she wore a pink gown, and" as hot is not encyclopedic
"and concluded it by blowing a kiss to the audience" → "and she concluded it by blowing a kiss to the audience" as it is confusing whether you mean her or not as of current
"After this, she performed the song" → "Carey later performed the song"
I understand that many need archiving, but the machine isn't working as of current so this cannot be done but it can be passed if other issues are adressed.
See "Billionaire" as an example of how to put various countries into one ref for release. Should be US, Spain, Hungary and France as they are the ones it is referenced as charting in.
There are numerous issues but since the article is quite small, I'll give you time and put it On hold. Just two things to mention - an image should be added to comply with the GA criteria and the digital download release should be referenced somewhere appropriate in the body. --Kyle Peake (talk) 09:41, 23 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Kyle Peake, I believe I have addressed every concern. Thanks for a greatly helpful and comprehensive review. The only suggestion I didn't implement was removing hot pink; it's an actual color and that's the wording used by the critic so it isn't unencyclopedic in my opinion? Have a great week.--18:52, 23 June 2019 (UTC)
@MaranoFan: Looks much better, do you think you could add some info about how Mustard became involved with Carey or something about another songwriter/producer? --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:56, 23 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
On hold. Just two things to mention - an image should be added to comply with the GA criteria and the digital download release should be referenced somewhere appropriate in the body. --Kyle Peake (talk) 09:41, 23 June 2019 (UTC)