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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:35, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
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- File:Wine and Roses.jpg has two empty fields for NFCC #1 and #2, this is not acceptable.
- "and the performances" perhaps "on-screen performances"?
- " 1.42 million" could use a non-breaking space.
- Notes could use references.
- "After Nacho Varga flees Lalo Salamanca's compound" you link them here but not the lead. I would do both.
- "tenants Sylvia and Mateo" comma after tenants.
- "calls Hector to say" you haven't mentioned him before so full name and link.
- "in his Gene Takavic persona" this is intractable to someone who isn't familiar with the series.
- "in the casino business" no need to link common English words like "casino".
- " days.[4][3]: 13:40–14:43" refs in numerical order.
- "The shot was completed practically" I don't know what this means.
- "a.[1][4][3]: 16:47–18:33 " numerical order for refs.
- What is "Zafiro Añejo"? Is it real? Non-experts would find this impossible to understand.
- "to land. It was added" merge, i.e. "to land and was added"
- "The shot was ... The shot is... " repetitive.
- Link gaffer.
- "On the review aggregator ..." what about other aggregators? Dislike single-sentence paragraphs too...
- Done – Nothing but user scores on Metacritic. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 00:02, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
- "and Michael Mando as Nacho" Mando is overlinked.
- " the #1 cable" avoid using "hash" for "number".
That's it, on hold. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 16:06, 1 May 2022 (UTC)
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