Talk:Wilton St Hill/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aaroncrick ^TALK 09:48, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thought I might do this quick one, as it obviously doesn't take much time and you've got enough up without reviews at the moment. I will go along and copy-edit if I need to do so, but feel free to revert. Cheers, Aaroncrick ^TALK 09:48, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

No Dab links

Early life and career

"Cricket in Trinidad at the time was divided along racial lines and to cricket clubs on the island, the colour of a player's skin was crucial."—I don't like the last part of the sentence after island. Comma should not be used. Seperate sentence would be what I'd favour.

Done. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:15, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

First-class cricketer

"... St Hill scored 6 runs, batting at number three, and 48 batting at number six."—Any reason why 6 isn't spelt out?

Er... Artistic merit? Fixed ! --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:15, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Link opening the batting?

Done. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:15, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Lord Harris, having seen this innings, saw this century and described St Hill as the best batsman in the West Indies."—Having seen this innings, well he obviously saw the century?

Done. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:15, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Despite his poor form, St Hill played in the first two Test matches, making 4 and 9 during West Indies inaugural Test, batting at number five and scoring 3 and 38 in the second Test, batting at number four."—How come you only spell out some? I've seen this used, however, when there's other scores in the sentence.

I'd prefer to leave this as there are other scores in the sentence above ten and I think it's better to have all the scores as words or figures and not mix. However, I realise this is a clash with the batting position, so... If it's a huge problem, I'll change it. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:15, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I see you dont spell out numbers in some sentences where there is no other figure above ten—why?

As far as I can tell, all the others are in a sentence with figures over ten, apart from the one above. However, I may be blind, so feel free to point them out. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:15, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Personality, style and technique

Can you link footwork? Too lazy to check.

Unfortunately not. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:15, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

How come the notes bit is broken into two columns?

Lazy copying from another article which had it for no obvious reason... Fixed --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:15, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Aaroncrick ^TALK 10:26, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

All done, I think, apart from 4 and 9. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:15, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]