Talk:William Warelwast/GA1

GA Review

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Hello, I'll be conducting this article's GA review. In short, I think it definitely fulfills the criteria:

Well-written: Quite. I only have a few prose/MOS suggestions to make.
Factually accurate and verifiable: Certainly, which I would expect from someone like Ealdgyth. :)
Broad in its coverage: Addresses the main aspects of the topic and stays focused.
Neutral: Yes.
Stable: Yes.
Illustrated, if possible, by images: Yes. There may be room for other available free images, but they're of course not necessary.

A few very minor points regarding #1:

There are some dashes (-) that need to be converted to en-dashes (–), especially in the refs.
Little is known of his background or family before 1087. Since the lead section stands alone as a summary, I feel the first sentence should establish (re-establish?) who "he" is.
...his career shows that he must have been literate and to have been able to speak well. Somewhat clumsy. Can we simplify with something like "and an accomplished/skilled speaker"?
...for the king to give to the king's new choice as archbishop. I see a lot of repetition of "the king" in this paragraph, but I do understand the need for it in most places. This sentence in particular seems to stick out; I think the second instance could safely be replaced by "his".
It was Warelwast who searched the baggage of Archbishop Anselm in 1097 as the archbishop was going into exile. I'm not sure what the latter part of the sentence is denoting; before the archbishop went into exile?
but he did manage keep the king from being sanctioned. to keep?
Warelwast spent much time in attendance on the king, spending time with the king in Normandy... another "him" instead of "the king".

Since these are all extremely minor and fussy points, I have no doubt that they don't stand in the way of this article's promotion to GA-status. Congrats! If you have any questions or comments, please feel free to contact me via my talk page. María (habla conmigo) 15:02, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]