Talk:William Penney, Baron Penney/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 07:20, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I will review, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 07:20, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

This looks very well put together, just the odd comment here and there Early life and education

and only son of father, William Alfred Penney,...: having father here seems redundant since you also identify the mother.
Y Deleted stray word. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 12:31, 22 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The infobox gives the Imperial College London as an alma mater but Royal College of Science. Suggest amending the infobox for consistency with the text, or clarify in the text the the RCS is part of the Imperial College.
Y Clarified. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 12:31, 22 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
He was awarded a PhD by the University of Cambridge in 1935 and a Doctor of Science in Mathematical Physics from the University of Cambridge in 1936.; suggest reworking this sentence so that University of Cambridge is only mentioned once.
Y Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 12:31, 22 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Manhattan Project

Rudolf Peierls recalled that: suggest amending this to something like "Rudolf Peierls, a fellow Manhattan scientist, recalled that:"
Y Changed as suggested. Hawkeye7 (discuss)
Joan Quennell to look after the boys: can a little context for Joan Quennell be provided? Was she a housekeeper or lab worker or some such?
Y Added a bit. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 12:31, 22 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

British hydrogen bomb

so a second series, Operation Mosaic,: suggest "so a second series of tests, Operation Mosaic,"
Y Changed as suggested. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 12:31, 22 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Honours and awards

In the infobox, the year of the Rumford Medal award is given as 1966, but in the text is 1969.
Y It was 1969. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 12:31, 22 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The Wilhelm Exner Medal is listed in the infobox but not mentioned in the text.
Y Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 12:31, 22 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Mention the Knight Commander in the infobox and maybe also the Medal of Freedom.
Y Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 12:31, 22 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Other stuff

References look solid
Image tags OK
No dupe links

I fixed a few obvious typos as I went along. That's my review done, sorry this took so long. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:45, 22 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The changes all look fine so I am passing this as a GA on the basis that I consider the article meets the necessary criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:12, 26 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]