Talk:William P. Halliday/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 18:39, 2 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

"and imigrated to America in 1818" immigrated
- Changed.
"Later, he was as a merchant, cotton planter, lumberman, banker, miller, coal mine operator, owned of vast tracts " he was a merchant...owner of vast
- Changed.
There are a few things that could probably be linked but aren't (University of Ohio, Civil War, various cities, etc.) but it's not a requirement.
- Changed.
"authorized to have $200,000.00 " for this and other currency mentions, the cents aren't needed.
- Changed.

Here's the rest:

"Cairo Illinois for the city at large ward with D. Hurd." comma after Illinois, also Hurd's full name is used in the following sentence, so clean that up.
- Changed.
"William Butler Duncan Charles Walsh, " comma after Duncan
- Changed.
"In fact, J. P. Morgan served as president and as a director" not really a fan of the in fact to start the sentence, but also not sure hw to best reword it.
- Changed.
'manner,"In ' space after comma
- Changed.
Not a requirement, but making an article on Hallidayboro and changing the redlink to blue would be nice.
- Good idea. Will do in the future.

Article now on hold, will pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman 17:16, 7 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]