Talk:William B. Cornwell/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seattle (talk · contribs) 14:18, 26 May 2014 (UTC) Initial observations:[reply]

No DAB links, no dead links

Files check out

Bibliography only lists books used in inline citations, inline citations click to appropriate books, both check out

Refs 20 and 30 need {{subscription required}}

The "Miscellany" section should be incorporated into other sections, see Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Trivia sections

The lead is overlinked; terms such as "lawyer" and "businessperson" should not be linked, as they are common. Uncommon terms like "jurisprudence" should remain linked.

Cornwell sold his ownership in the Hampshire Review to his brother in 1902 and relocated to Fairmont, where he engaged in the practice of law until 1910. I thought he sold his stake in 1900?

A sentence on his death should be added to the lead to represent the "later life and death" section?

I'll review the rest of the article upon responses to these comments. Thanks, Seattle (talk) 14:18, 26 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Seattle, thank you so incredibly much for conducting this review! I've edited the article so that it incorporates all the above suggestions. Please let me know if you have any additional comments, questions, or suggestions! -- Caponer (talk) 15:29, 26 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Early life and family":

Delink "twin'

"Legal education and career"

Watch overlinking, "interview" and "candidate".

In August 1908, Cornwell predicted in a newspaper interview that Democratic Party West Virginia gubernatorial candidate Louis Bennett would win the 1908 West Virginia gubernatorial election by 25,000 votes against Republican Party candidate William E. Glasscock. This sentence is a bit wordy, try removing the first "West Virginia", since it's clarified later in the sentence which race he's in.

Later that same year in 1890 "in 1890" is repetitious from "later that same year"

"Business and railroad career"

Keep watching overlinking.

Would it be possible to merge the "Personal life" section into the rest of the article? It feels out of place chronologically, and the article would flow better if it ended with Cornwell's death, as opposed to his marriage.

William Benjamin Cornwell (November 25, 1864 – April 8, 1926) was a prominent American lawyer "prominent" is a WP:PEACOCK term.

Overall, this article is close to GA requirements; Cornwell has a noted place in West Virginia history. His combination of lumber and railroad interests is a classic example of vertical integration, while his acquisition of the rival newspaper exemplifies horizontal integration. Quite the historical figure. Seattle (talk) 18:08, 26 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Seattle, thank you for your extraordinary review of this article! You thoughtful guidance is greatly appreciated, and I apologize for my delayed response. I've fixed all the above issues, with the exception of folding in the personal life section into the rest of the article! I'll try and finish this soon, and will let you know when I've fully addressed your suggestion! Thank you again! -- Caponer (talk) 21:10, 3 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Seattle, I've completed my incorporation of your suggestions into the article! Please take a look and let me know if my edits fully address all your comments and questions! Thanks again for taking the time to review this article! -- Caponer (talk) 00:21, 6 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Passing the article as a GA. Thanks, Seattle (talk) 00:35, 6 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]