Talk:Wild Honey (album)/GA1
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 23:41, 9 February 2018 (UTC)
I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 23:41, 9 February 2018 (UTC)
- The "ball-less choir boys" quote in the lead should be cited there.
- As with chillwave I'm concerned about the number of quotes used. Can you try to reduce the use of quotes in the "Style and production" and "Songs" section? I'd like to see the quotes reduced in "Release" and "Retrospective reviews" too, per WP:Copyediting reception sections, but for GA I think that's less important.
I started copyediting; the prose in is good shape, but I'm going to pause the review since I've asked you to do some rewriting. Once we're agreed on the quotes I'll go back through. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 12:09, 10 February 2018 (UTC)
- Ilovetopaint: just checking that you saw the notification about this review. Let me know if you need more time to work on it. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 13:01, 17 February 2018 (UTC)
- Sorry, haven't had much time - I trimmed/removed a couple lines. The reason why the first paragraph of "Style and production" reads the way it does is because of another user some years ago who insisted that genres were a matter of opinion and had to have in-text attribution. --Ilovetopaint (talk) 19:23, 17 February 2018 (UTC)
- No hurry, so long as I know you're working on it. For the "Style and production" section, it's not so much the attribution, though that is sometimes clunky; it's the lengthy quotes. Quotes from band members are easier to justify, but I would think the quotes from Harrison, Williams, and Dillon could be paraphrased. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 19:32, 17 February 2018 (UTC)
- Sorry, haven't had much time - I trimmed/removed a couple lines. The reason why the first paragraph of "Style and production" reads the way it does is because of another user some years ago who insisted that genres were a matter of opinion and had to have in-text attribution. --Ilovetopaint (talk) 19:23, 17 February 2018 (UTC)
Done trimmed a bit --Ilovetopaint (talk) 01:13, 22 February 2018 (UTC)
Much better; I think the prose is fine now.
- Looking through the sources, can you say what makes these reliable?
- esquarterly.com -- seems to be a personal website.
- Exceptional WP:SPS: Bellagio 10452 is managed by Andrew Doe with help from Craig Slowinski, both of whom have written liner notes for many of the band's reissued albums since the 2000s. Doe also co-wrote The Complete Guide to the Music of the Beach Boys, a book published by Omnibus Press in 2004.--Ilovetopaint (talk) 12:13, 24 February 2018 (UTC)
- acclaimedmusic.net -- also seems to be a personal website
- rockcellarmagazine.com
- rockcritics.com
- removed all above--Ilovetopaint (talk) 12:13, 24 February 2018 (UTC)
-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 11:15, 22 February 2018 (UTC)
- OK on esquarterly.com. That's everything; promoting to GA. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 13:27, 24 February 2018 (UTC)