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Reviewer: Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 10:43, 6 December 2012 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this article. Comments will be within the next few hours.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 10:43, 6 December 2012 (UTC)
- Lead
Per WP:LINKSTYLE, "When possible, avoid placing links next to each other so that they look like a single link". Not sure if you can work around it, but see if you can.
Get citations out of the lead.
In the infobox, "Steel - Wing Coaster" is wrong. I'm almost positive it should be a "–".
"a height of 210-foot" -> "a height of 210 feet
- Not necessarily a concern for this review, but is there a better picture out there that shows more of the roller coaster? The one in the infobox just shows (what I'm guessing) a small part of the ride.
- Not at this stage. A search for pictures with relevant licensing has returned no results. Themeparkgc Talk 23:49, 7 December 2012 (UTC)
- That's fine. Just keep a heads up for one if you plan to take this to FA.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 07:43, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
- That's fine. Just keep a heads up for one if you plan to take this to FA.
- Not at this stage. A search for pictures with relevant licensing has returned no results. Themeparkgc Talk 23:49, 7 December 2012 (UTC)
- History
"Speculation of Wild Eagle began" -> "Speculation of Wild Eagle began"
"to discuss Dollywood's 2012 attraction" What's Dollywood? Either wikilink or clarify what it is
- "Pigeon Forge Planning Commission" same as above, either wikilink or clarify what the commission is
"Four days later" you never gave a date before, just March 2011, so this part doesn't make sense.
"On September 4, 2011, Wild Eagle was" -> "On September 4, 2011, Wild Eagle was
"On October 7, 2011, the lift hill was completed and by the end of October 2011, the track layout was complete." -> "On October 7, 2011, the lift hill was completed, and by the end of October 2011, the track layout was complete."
"42 feet and a total weight of 8000 pounds" -> "42 feet (13 m) and a total weight of 8,000 pounds (3,600 kg)"
What's a soft-opening? And, why is that hyphenated, but in the infobox it's not?
- Ride experience
Change the section name to just Experience, per WP:HEADINGS.
Awesome quote. I like it. Wikilink Dolly Parton, though.
- I understand most of the words here, but for someone without roller coaster knowledge it may be tough. I know it may be difficult, but can you explain what a zero-g roll is in the text? Also, it's called a zero-gravity roll, per its article page.
DoneThemeparkgc Talk 23:49, 7 December 2012 (UTC)- Not yet. Camelback hill is still unexplained.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 07:43, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
- I added a bit of an explanation for a camelback hill. Themeparkgc Talk 01:16, 9 December 2012 (UTC)
- Not yet. Camelback hill is still unexplained.
"next riders board the train.[12][1]" -> "next riders board the train.[1][12]"
"Because the seats are located either on the left or right of the track, a fake eagle is placed on top of each car to add to the theme of the roller coaster." unsourced
- Done I reworded the sentence slightly so it could be sourced. Themeparkgc Talk 01:03, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
- References
Dates are inconsistent
For #1, why is there "Database Entry"? I don't see it on the link, and not sure why it's in italics.
For #2, it's a journal, so {{Cite journal}} should be used. Also, there's 48 pages. Needs a page number (or pages).
- For #3, #4, #7, #11, dead link
- Partly done Fixed 3/4 of the links with archives. Themeparkgc Talk 00:38, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
- Okay. That's fine. If you wish to take the article to FA, this would need to be replaced.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 07:43, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
- Okay. That's fine. If you wish to take the article to FA, this would need to be replaced.
- Partly done Fixed 3/4 of the links with archives. Themeparkgc Talk 00:38, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
For #5, what makes Coaster101 a reliable source?
- Nothing (as far as I can see). I am trying to find a replacement source. If I can't I'll just end up removing that sentence. Themeparkgc Talk 01:03, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
- Alright. Just keep me updated.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 07:43, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
- I've decided to remove it. Themeparkgc Talk 01:16, 9 December 2012 (UTC)
- Alright. Just keep me updated.
- Nothing (as far as I can see). I am trying to find a replacement source. If I can't I'll just end up removing that sentence. Themeparkgc Talk 01:03, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
For #6, remove Press Release and use {{Cite press release}} instead.
For #8, not sure how reliable facebook is, but it's the track's official page, so I can understand. However, the photos don't have a date, so I can't back up the claims.
- If you move your mouse over the line that says "Updated over a year ago" you will be given a date of 7 October 2011. This matches the dates on the individual photos if you click on them. Is this enough? Themeparkgc Talk 00:53, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
- Yup. That works well.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 07:43, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
- Yup. That works well.
- If you move your mouse over the line that says "Updated over a year ago" you will be given a date of 7 October 2011. This matches the dates on the individual photos if you click on them. Is this enough? Themeparkgc Talk 00:53, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
For #9, it's a blog. What makes it a RS?
- Done This reference has been replaced. Themeparkgc Talk 00:57, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
For #11, The Mountain Press -> The Mountain Press
For #12, YouTube should be the publisher
Good work on the article thus far. Once these comments are addressed, I will re-evaluate the article and see where it goes from there. I have this page bookmarked, but if you need to contact me, ping my talk page.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 11:10, 6 December 2012 (UTC)
- I have resolved the majority of the issues identified above. There are just two points still pending (dates on Facebook and Coaster101). Themeparkgc Talk 01:03, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
- Great work. Once these final comments are addressed, I'll pass the article.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 07:43, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
- I believe I have addressed all the comments. Themeparkgc Talk 01:16, 9 December 2012 (UTC)
- Yup! Good work on the article. Passed.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 01:48, 9 December 2012 (UTC)
- Yup! Good work on the article. Passed.
- I believe I have addressed all the comments. Themeparkgc Talk 01:16, 9 December 2012 (UTC)
- Great work. Once these final comments are addressed, I'll pass the article.