Talk:Whitechapel Road/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 16:11, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll have this done as soon as I can JAGUAR 16:11, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

"It remains an important road and is marked with bus lanes, with limited parking" - what makes this any different from almost every road in Central London that has too many bus lanes and no parking!

Hmmm. Wonder what should we write instead. In this case, TFL considers it important to mention the bus lanes and lack of parking, and other sources do. I think it's because somebody visiting might expect parking near the market or something? :-/ Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 16:30, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

True, I think it's OK to leave it as it is, especially if sources consider the two things important here! JAGUAR 16:50, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"to Venta Icenorum (Caistor St Edmund near Norfolk)" - it has to be in Norfolk, so I would re-word this to either in Norfolk or near Norwich?

D'oh - fixed! Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 16:30, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"The school expanded with a new hall and classrooms, with further improvements in 1909" - did al of the expansions take place in 1909? If so the sentence needs to be restructured

I forgot to transcribe a date from the source - fixed Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 18:00, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Just to the east of the market are almshouses at Trinity House" - I would link almshouse for accessibility

Done Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 18:00, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"a police raid uncovered unlicensed horse and dog race betting, arresting the club's owner and 21 patrons" - might sound better as a police raid uncovered unlicensed horse and dog race betting, resulting in the arrest of the club's owner and 21 patrons

I went with "which led to the arrest of" Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 18:00, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"landlord of the Blind Beggar" - this is the first mention of the Blind Beggar, so should the pub be linked here?

Done (that's what happens when you expand articles backwards!) Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 18:00, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"On 4 October 1936, British Union of Fascists Oswald Mosley" - might be worth changed it to "British Union of Fascists leader'/founder Oswald Mosley"

Added "leader" Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 18:00, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

References

No dead links

On hold

That's all I could find with this article, a short review but the overall it is compact and well written. Once they're all addressed then this should have no problem passing! JAGUAR 16:49, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar: I've addressed the above issues. I've also done a proper proof-read now and fixed a few other things. Biggest howlers were not actually correctly citing St Mary's (Whitechapel Road)'s destruction in 1940 and getting the Whitechapel Murder victim's name wrong (though I think this is the source's fault, unlike many articles I'll assume Whitechapel Murders is correct as it's an FA). Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 18:02, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for addressing all of them! The article looks great now and meets the GA criteria. I didn't spot the St Mary's destruction source, but I was happy with the state of the prose at the time. I look forward to reviewing any more Monopoly squares if need be

JAGUAR 20:19, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]