Talk:Wheelie and the Chopper Bunch/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Argento Surfer (talk · contribs) 15:51, 9 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

It may take three days for me to complete my initial review (I am unable to edit on weekends). I will note/pass items as I go along. You don't need to wait for me to finish to begin addressing them. Most of my comments are open for discussion, so feel free to question anything. Once complete, I will be claiming points for this review in the 2017 WikiCup. Argento Surfer (talk) 15:51, 9 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
Premise
"a land full of automobiles" I think sentient (or a synonym) should be added in front of automobiles for clarity.

I think Cycle World should be linked in the prose.

Characters
Why is this section arranged by voice actor instead of character? I think it would be more effective in the opposite order. As is, the protagonist and antagonist are currently lumped into the same bullet point.
Done – I did some "flip-flopping" and separated the protagonist and antagonist. Carbrera (talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).[reply]

Per WP:PROTAGONIST, Wheelie should be described as the lead or star, not the protagonist.
Done – I used "lead" instead of "protagonist". Carbrera (talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).[reply]

Production
"Wheelie and the Chopper Bunch premiered nearly one year after the debut of Speed Buggy in 1973" - suggest "Wheelie and the Chopper Bunch premiered in 1973, nearly one year after the debut of Speed Buggy, another Hanna-Barbera cartoon with similar themes.
Done – Took your suggestion. Carbrera (talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).[reply]

I suggest relocating the Broadcast subsection from reception to production and locating it between the current paragraphs. This is in line with FA article Ed, Edd n Eddy and clarifies that it was still being aired when Bryne's comic was commissioned.
Done – Relocated the section and added appropriate sub-titles. Carbrera (talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).[reply]

" his first "full issue" series of comic books" - what does "full issue" mean? That he did art for the full issue? That he did pencils and inks? Pencils, inks, and scripting?
Done – Removed "full issue" because I believe the sentence (as it is) gives the same effect. Carbrera (talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).[reply]

I think it's worth mentioning the comics were published by Charlton Comics.
Done – Added. Carbrera (talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).[reply]

"According to Byrne himself, he also felt... " - I think "Byrne also said he felt..." reads more smoothly.
Done – Took your suggestion. Carbrera (talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).[reply]

Episodes
no concerns

Reception
no concerns

Lead
no concerns

B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
no concern
Is it verifiable with no original research?
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
no concern

B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
no concern

C. It contains no original research:
no concerns

D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
Ear wig results are for common phrases like the title. No concern
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
no concerns

B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
no concerns
Is it neutral?
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
no concerns
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
no ongoing conflicts or vandalism.
Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
no concern

B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
no concern
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Pass pending responses to concerns listed above. Argento Surfer (talk) 20:31, 9 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Argento Surfer – Thank you so much for the review! I changed the article accordingly and left you some comments above. Please let me know if you need any additional information from me. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).[reply]
Nice work. Easy pass. Argento Surfer (talk) 12:45, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]