Talk:What It Is to Burn/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 13:18, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I recall you being respectful and patient after I delivered two reviews for you in the past; I will take this article on now as part of the GAN drive! --K. Peake 13:18, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

June–July, August–September 2001 → June–September 2001
Replace hlist with bullet points in the infobox
Target Pop punk to Pop-punk
Separate labels using bullet points
"released on March 12, 2002, jointly through" → "It was released on March 12, 2002, through" as a new sentence
"to Drive-Thru Records. Recording for their debut album" → "to Drive-Thru. Recording for the album"
Wikilink music video
"appeared in January 2003." → "was released in January 2003."
The last two sentences of this para should come directly after this one instead
"Initial touring to promote the album consisted" → "Initial accompanying tours for promotion consisted" and this belongs as the second sentence of the second para in the new order
"in the US and the UK" → "in the United States and the United Kingdom"
"The band also appeared at" → "The band later appeared on" and this should still follow the other tour sentence in the new order
"The album's title-track was released as a radio single in" → "The title-track "What Is It to Burn" was released as the lead single in" with the appropriate wikilink
"by "Letters to You" in April." → "by the single "Letters to You" in April of that year." with the appropriate target
"Double A-sided single "New Beginnings"/"What It Is to Burn" was released in August." → ""New Beginnings"/"What It Is to Burn" was released as the third and final single on a double A-side in August 2003."
Move the chart positions of the singles to being here, though they may be ordered more afterwards
"primarily a pop punk/emo release," → "primarily a pop punk and emo release," with the target
"is also classed as" → "was also classed as"
"It received a positive reaction from" → "The album received generally positive reviews from"
"with many finding it an enjoyable listen." → "being found as an enjoyable listen by many."
"The album charted at number 99 on the Billboard 200 in the US and at number 177 in the UK." → "On the US Billboard 200, What It Is to Burn charted at number 99, while it reached number 177 on the UK Albums Chart." with the wikilink and this should begin a third para
"album sales stood at over 400,000 copies." → "the album has sold over 400,000 copies worldwide."
"charted on the UK top 40 singles chart," → "charted at number 39 on the UK Singles Chart," with the wikilink
"the top 40 on the" → "the top 40 of the US"
"The album has since been" → "It has since been"
"the emo/post-hardcore scene." → "the emo and post-hardcore scenes."
"The band went on a" → "Finch embarked on a"
"tour for the album in 2013 through" → "tour in 2013 across"
"Japan and Australia." → "Japan, and Australia."

Background and production

"under the name Numb with" → "under the name of Numb, with"
"It was thought that" → "It was rumored that"
"though Finch has since" → "though Finch have since"
The source identifies the band as being named Evitca Fresh; fix this
"owner Richard Reines[1]" → "owner Richard Reines," and move [1] solely to the end of the sentence since it backs all of that up
Target fan letter to Fan mail
"Reines offered the group a chance to perform and" → "Richard offered the band a chance to perform for Drive-Thru Records and" per MOS:SAMESURNAME
"co-label owner, Stefanie" → "co-label owner, Stefanie Reines"
"were impressed and signed the group." → "were impressed by the performance and signed Finch afterwards."
Wikilink Escondido, California
"in February and April 2001." → "in February and April of 2001."
"They began recording" → "Finch began recording"
"in June[5]" → "in June of that year" and move [5] solely to the end of the sentence after [4]
"tracking guitars in July." → "tracking guitars for the album in July 2001."
"amplifiers. Linares used" → "amplifiers, while Linares used"
"helped with the album's with guitar effects." → "with the guitar effects on What It is to Burn."
"into August and September." → "throughout 2001, going into August and September."
"The group met Palumbo at" → "Finch first met Palumbo at"
"show and had kept in" → "show, and had kept in"
"While they were recording, they asked him" → "While they were recording for the album, the band asked Palumbo"
"Trombino did programming" → "Trombino completed programming"
Target mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
Target mastered to Mastering (audio)

Composition

Retitle to Composition and lyrics
"Musically, the album has been" → "Musically, What It Is to Burn has been"
Target pop punk to Pop-punk
Remove [14] since not only is four sources enough to be together, but any more is too much to back up the genre
"The release drew comparisons to" → "The album received comparisons to the music of"
"Linkin Park and" → "Linkin Park, and"
"crooning and screaming;" → "crooning and screaming on What It Is to Burn;" with the target
"around the group jamming." → "around Finch jamming."
"said they could write a song" → "said they could sometimes write a song"
"before shifting to aggressive" → "before the song shifts to aggressive"
Wikilink power chords instead of the full two words
"It sets the tone for the album" → "The song sets the tone for What It Is to Burn"
"memorable melodies' parts and tuneful choruses." → "memorable melodies and tuneful choruses." with the target
"on "Letters to You" bordered on" → "on "Letters to You" border on"
"was one of the group's oldest songs," → "was one of Finch's oldest songs,"
"said was about a couple" → "said is about a couple"
"addressing a letter" → "sending a letter"

Release

Retitle to Release and promotion
"The Falling into Place EP was released" → "Finch's debut EP Falling into Place was released"
[25] should solely be at the end of the sentence
"A music video was released for "Letters to You" in" → "A music video for "Letters to You" was released in" with the wikilink
""[a]trocious", while" → ""[a]trocious," while"
"On January 13, "Untitled" was" → "On January 13, 2001, the track "Untitled" was"
Target MCA to MCA Records
"and measurements. The back cover" → "and measurements, while the back cover"
[7] offers mention of the beaker with boiling liquid but not it being on the back cover
"boiling liquid. Doherty said they" → "boiling liquid; Doherty said the band"
"cool imagery"." → "cool imagery.""
"It was replaced on later pressings" → "The demo was replaced on the later pressings"
"The UK edition," → "The United Kingdom edition,"
Target acoustic to Acoustic music
"The group filmed another music video for" → "Finch filmed a new music video for"
"in mid-April 2002[31]" → "in mid-April 2002,[31]"
"on May 24." → "on May 24, 2002."
"the group signed to" → "the band signed to"
Wikilink distribution deal
"was released as a radio single[37]" → "was released to radio stations across the United States as the lead single from What Is It to Burn,[37]" with the wikilink
"the track[12] with director Alexander Kosta." → "the track,[12] which was directed by Alexander Kosta.
"on February 21, 2003." → "on February 12, 2003."
"In March, Punknews.org held" → "In March of that year, Punknews.org held"
Target vinyl to Phonograph record
"On April 22, "Letters to You" was released as a single." → "On April 22, 2003, "Letters to You" was released on CD as What Is It to Burn's second single." with the targets
"and "Letters to You"." → "and "Letters to You" as bonus tracks."
"Following this," → "Following on from this,"
"as a double A-sided single on August 25." → "on a double A-sided as the album's third and final single on August 25, 2003." with the target

Touring

Retitle to Tours
"Following the album's release, the group" → "Following the release of What It Is to Burn, Finch"
"In April and May 2002, the group went on tour with" → "In April and May of 2002, the band toured with"
"Following this, the group" → "After this, they"
Remove wikilink on New Found Glory
"the group performed on" → "Finch performed on"
[47] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [48]
"the Drive-Thru Records Stage." → "the Drive-Thru Records stage."
"In late August, the group performed" → "In late August of 2002, the band performed"
"In September, the group performed" → "The following month, Finch performed"
"In October and November," → "In October and November of 2002,"
"went tour across the US alongside" → "embarked on a tour across the US with"
"In November and December, the group" → "In the last two months of the year, Finch"
[52] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [53]
"with From Autumn to Ashes and" → "with From Autumn to Ashes as well as"
[54] should solely be at the end of the sentence
"January and February 2003." → "January and February of 2003."
"initially planned to support before being" → "initially planned to be the support act, before they were"
"went on a co-heading US tour" → "went on a co-headlining US tour"
"Following this, the group continued touring" → "Following on from this, Finch continued touring"
[57] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [58]
"until early March." → "until early March of 2003."
"In March, the group went" → "That same month, the band went"
"In April, the group performed" → "In April 2003, they performed"
"In early May, the band performed at" → "In early May of 2003, Finch performed for"
"In June, the band" → "The following month, the band"
"appeared on Jimmy Kimmel Live![62]" → "appeared on Jimmy Kimmel Live!,[62]"
"at KROQ's Weenie Roast festival." → "at the KROQ Weenie Roast festival."
"In early July, the group appeared" → "In early July of 2003, Finch appeared"
"In August, the group performed" → "The following month, they performed"

Reception

Retitle to Critical reception and I will elaborated on the new order below
Target FasterLouder to Junkee Media

Critical response

This should not be under a sub-section; it should be the only part of the Critical reception section
"was received positively for the most part by" → "was met with generally positive reviews from"
"calling the release "phenomenal", noting that the group" → "calling the album "phenomenal," noting that Finch"
"The record "exemplifies" → "He also wrote that the album "exemplifies"
"punk scene", going on to list" → "punk scene," citing"
"specific sound. The album showcases the group's" → "specific sound, observing that the album showcases their"
"perky rock" incorporating Glassjaw," → "perky rock," incorporating Glassjaw,"
Wikilink Molotov cocktail
Remove The Gateway per WP:RSSM
"referred to the release as an" → "referred to What It Is to Burn as an"
Target FasterLouder to Junkee Media
"described it an" → "described it as an"
Wikilink chord progressions
"to the release which" → "to the album, which"
"He commended the band" → "He commended Finch"
"said it had "perfect mix" → "said the album has "the perfect mix"
"the extra edge"," → "the extra edge,""
"Ultimate Guitar hailed the release," → "The team from Ultimate Guitar hailed the album,"
"and lacked any" → "and lacks any"
"said the group" → "commented that Finch"
Wikilink punk rock
Target metal to Heavy metal music
"she felt the lyrics" → "she felt that the lyrical content on What It Is to Burn"
"said the group bounced" → "said the band bounced"
"bubbly beats", a fusion which" → "bubbly beats," a fusion that"
"of charisma", he added." → "of charisma," Lecaro added."
"criticized the song titles, saying that the band" → "criticized the titles of the songs on the album, saying that Finch"

Commercial performance and legacy

This should be its own section
"at number 99 on the" → "at number 99 on the US"
Remove Heatseeker Albums as it is non-notable
The April 2003 figures should be in the sentence after the first instead
"It also charted at number 177 in the UK. "Letters to You" charted in the UK at number 39." → "It charted at number 177 on the UK Albums Chart, while "Letters to You" reached number 39 on the UK Singles Chart." with the wikilinks
"charted at number 15 on the" → "peaked at number 15 on the US"
[75] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [76]
Target Mainstream Rock to Mainstream Rock (chart)
"the album had sold over 400,000 copies." → "What It Is to Burn had sold over 400,000 copies worldwide."
Rankings should be at the start of the second para
"included the album's title-track on their list" → "included "What It Is to Burn" at number 47 on their list" since otherwise it sounds like an unordered list
"said the album was" → "said What It Is to Burn was"
"leading the genre" → "noting it for leading the genre"
"In 2013, the group" → "In 2013, Finch"
"It was initially" → "The celebration was initially"
"released a live/video album from this tour" → "released a live video album of the anniversary celebrations"
"The album has been" → "What It Is to Burn has been"
"Finch's use of" → "Finch's mix of"
Remove wikilink on A Day to Remember

Track listing

Wikilink Mark Trombino
re-recorded from the Falling into Place EP → re-recorded from the EP Falling into Place, but with no target on the second mention

Personnel

Split P.R. Brown and Kris McCaddon from the previous two names under production into their own sub-heading; title this fourth one Design

Chart positions

Retitle to Charts
Remove non-notable Heatseeker Albums chart

References

Citations

Copyvio score looks good at dead on 20%; congrats!
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Remove target on Finch for ref 4
Target Kludge to Kludge (magazine) on ref 7
Remove the publisher from refs 8, 10, 11, 17, 44, 76, 77, 78 and 83
WP:OVERLINK of Chart Attack on ref 12 and remove the publisher
Wikilink Kerrang! on ref 15
WP:OVERLINK of Kludge on ref 16
Wikilink Exclaim! on ref 18 and remove the publisher
Wikilink Los Angeles Times on ref 19 and remove the publisher
Remove the author from refs 20 and 65
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 21
Target FasterLouder to Junkee Media on ref 22 and remove the publisher
Remove the author from ref 23 and target Alternative Press to Alternative Press (magazine)
WP:OVERLINK of Finch, MCA and and Drive-Thru Records on ref 42
WP:OVERLINK of Finch and MCA Records on ref 43
Wikilink Metal Hammer on ref 52 and remove the publisher
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 56 and remove the publisher
Wikilink Las Magazine on ref 68
Remove the author from ref 70 and wikilink Ultimate Guitar
Remove ref 71 per WP:RSSM
Zobbel → Zobbel.de on ref 74
Target Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on ref 75 and remove the publisher
Cite Punknews.org as publisher instead for ref 84
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 88 and wikilink Rock Sound
Killthemusic → Killthemusic.net on ref 89

Works cited

Target CMJ New Music Report to CMJ

Final comments and verdict

On hold until the issues are fixed, though I suspect you should go through this quite well. --K. Peake 16:42, 9 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Yeepsi (talk) 18:01, 9 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Yeepsi Did some minor copy editing, but I am very impressed with you quick response rate and how great the work itself is! ✓ Pass time. --K. Peake 07:02, 10 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]