Talk:What's a Nice Girl like You Doing in a Place like This?/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 14:38, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Shall be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 14:38, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Lead

Delink black and white per MOS:OVERLINK
"The film is shot in 16 mm film and 9 minutes long. The film features animation, montage, jump cuts, associative editing, and freeze-frame shots." - think these sentences could be merged and shortened slightly
"Scorsese, said the film has no depth at all." - the comma is unneeded
"He directed the film shortly after watching Federico Fellini's surrealist comedy-drama 8½ (1963)" - Federico Fellini's 1963 surrealist comedy-drama 8½
"The film was supposed to be a horror film but it later turned out be a comedy." - intended
Also, repetition of the word "film" in the above sentence is not recommended
How about give a brief mention of the reception of the film by reviewers?

Summary

"(played by Zeph Michaelis)" - I don't think the wording such as "played by" is needed in all of the instances the phrase is mentioned in the section
"is a writer who buys a picture of a boat on a lake. He becomes obsessed with the picture." - how about merging these two sentences and shorting it slightly to avoid an almost CV-based stacatto
"he finds himself trapped inside of the picture." - inside of it.

Cast

"Credits adapted from British Film Institute." - from the British Film Institute.

Production

"The film is the first film of Martin Scorsese." - repetition of the word "film"
"What's a Nice Girl Like You Doing in a Place Like This? was supposed to be a horror film" - intended
"The film features music of Richard H. Coll," - the text in bold should be changed to either features the music of Richard H. Coll or music from Richard H. Coll,
"and it is edited by Robert Hunsicker." - was edited by Robert Hunsicker.
"after watching Federico Fellini's surrealist comedy-drama 8½ (1963) for the first time." - reduce the amount of links per MOS:SEAOFBLUE
"but the re-release is 10m 2s." - 10 minutes, 2 seconds.

Reception

"Martin Scorsese described the film as "a tale of pure paranoia"." - it should be just Scorsese per MOS:SURNAME
Briefly state who Annette Wernblad is
"Peter Galvin of Special Broadcasting Service wrote," - of the Special Broadcasting Service

References

Both mentions of Univ. Press of Mississippi should be University Press of Mississippi
Reference 5 should include the author who wrote the article
Reference is lacking the date it was published
Reference 10 is missing the author of the article and the date it was published

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 15:31, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

MWright96, All done. Thanks for the review. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSA^talk 15:57, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@CAPTAIN MEDUSA: Nice quick response. Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 16:23, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- @MWright96: Thank you so much. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSA^talk 16:25, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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