Talk:West Triangle Economic Zone

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:West Triangle Economic Zone/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Plarem (talk · contribs) 11:00, 19 June 2013 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

References:

• The following references are dead: 6, 10, 12, 13. Please fix them.

They are now fixed. 069952497a^{Comments and complaints}_{Stuff I've done} 20:34, 19 June 2013 (UTC)

• There are some unreferenced claims, for example: "The creation of the zone was originally proposed by Chongqing in 2009, as part of the 12th Chinese 5-year plan. Xi'an and Chengdu agreed to the proposal." or "Chengdu has been officially designated China's western center of logistics, commerce, finance, science and technology, as well as a hub of transportation and communication." Every claim has to be referenced, even if it can be referenced with a reference that is in the article.

These are now referenced. 069952497a^{Comments and complaints}_{Stuff I've done} 20:46, 19 June 2013 (UTC)

• Other unreferenced claims:
  • "Traditionally, the West of China has been weaker economically, as it promises a less lucrative return to the investors than its eastern competitors."
  • "It is also an important base for manufacturing and agriculture."
  • "Important locally based companies include Chengdu Sugar and Wine Co. Ltd., Chengdu Food Group, Sichuan Medicine Co. Ltd., Chengdu Automobile Co. Ltd. etc., which support the city's food, medicine, machinery and information technology industries."
  • "Furthermore, Chengdu has also attracted many other major global corporations, including Citigroup, HSBC, Standard Chartered Bank, ABN AMRO, BNP Paribas, JPMorgan Chase and The Bank of Tokyo-Mitsubishi UFJ in the banking sector."
  • "More than 1,300 people move into the city daily, bolstering the economy by approximately 100 million Yuan."
  • "Xi’an became a major target for accelerated attention, and is now pioneer in software industry in China."
  • "Xi'an is the largest economy of the Shaanxi province, with a GDP of 324.1 billion Yuan in 2010."
  • "Xi'an is also one of the first service outsourcing cities in China, with over 800 corporations in the industry."
  • "The city's output value from this sector exceeded RMB 23 billion in 2008."
  • "In 2010, 52 million domestic tourists visited Xi'an, earning a total income of RMB 40.52 billion."
  • "The mayor is Ge Honglin,"
  • "It contains 9 districts, 4 county-level cities, and 6 counties."
  • "Additionally, since ancient times, when it was known as Chang'an, it served as the capital of many dynasties."
  • "the CPC Committee Secretary is Sun Qingyun."
  • and the table in 'Statistics' isn't fully referenced.

Okay, I think I got all of them. 069952497a^{Comments and complaints}_{Stuff I've done} 20:54, 21 June 2013 (UTC)

MoS:

• Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article. Examples include: aluminum (A) (British: aluminium), aluminium (B) (American: aluminum), meter (A) (British: metre), fibre (B) (American: fiber).

I've changed them all to the American spelling. 069952497a^{Comments and complaints}_{Stuff I've done} 23:37, 20 June 2013 (UTC)

• The lead should summarise everything that is in the article, currently, it only summaries most, and vaguely. You should also include examples of companies that operate in the 3 cities, the total populations of the 3 cities, etc.

The lead has been expanded to include several more points of information. 069952497a^{Comments and complaints}_{Stuff I've done} 14:04, 22 June 2013 (UTC)

• You could also use this Template:Infobox subnational economy as a suitable infobox for the article.

I have included the infobox, although at present I cannot find many statistics for it. 069952497a^{Comments and complaints}_{Stuff I've done} 14:18, 22 June 2013 (UTC)

Major aspects:

• The article does not have an explanation of what the zone is for; it doesn't explain why the zone was formed, for what reason, and all this should be in the 'Formation' section.

I've expanded that section of the article and have hopefully addressed your concerns. Thank you very much for the review! 069952497a^{Comments and complaints}_{Stuff I've done} 21:16, 19 June 2013 (UTC)

NPOV:

• Would the cities have problems with human rights protestors, e.g. Amnesty International, or human rights issues? If so, please include that in the article.

Done. 069952497a^{Comments and complaints}_{Stuff I've done} 14:50, 22 June 2013 (UTC)

• Would the federal government also be involved in the Economic Zone? Please include the viewpoint of the Federal Gov'nment, a sentence or two will probably do.

Done. 069952497a^{Comments and complaints}_{Stuff I've done} 14:35, 22 June 2013 (UTC)

Will finish off later. – Plarem ^{(User talk)} 11:46, 19 June 2013 (UTC)
Will finish off later. – Plarem ^{(User talk)} 11:15, 20 June 2013 (UTC)

Review finished. On hold for 7 days, but I will come back and check on your progress every day. – Plarem ^{(User talk)} 11:07, 21 June 2013 (UTC)

PASS — Well done on writing a good article! I have made a few minor edits, like spacing out the lead and adding a comma to a number to satisfy MOS:NUMBERS. I must say that I am very impressed with your editing skills, in how fast you satisfied my comments. Anyway, well done! – Plarem ^{(User talk)} 20:27, 22 June 2013 (UTC)

Thank you very much! 069952497a^{Comments and complaints}_{Stuff I've done} 20:30, 22 June 2013 (UTC)