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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:39, 5 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • "$2Bill tour. It began on ..." you mean the WTTUT began, not the $2Bill tour began, but this is confusing.
Fixed.
  • "a green tour", consider linking green appropriately.
Linked to Environmentalism.
  • [Fair use of image checks out fine.]
  • "Thirty Seconds to Mars second studio" missing apostrophe.
Fixed.
  • "..and commenced ... and ended..." bit too much run-on for my liking in this sentence.
Fixed.
  • "A limited amount of tickets..." -> "limited number of tickets"
Fixed.
  • "that would minimized" no d required.
Fixed.
  • "tour as," not sure that should be a comma, perhaps a colon.
Fixed.
  • "positive review ... positive review" a little repetitive.
Fixed.
  • Representative set list isn't referenced.
Added a source.
  • [I added col scopes per MOS:DTT.]
  • Not convinced you really need that huge rowspan column for United States when all dates were in the United States.
I would leave it per convention.
  • I'm not familiar with several of the sources, what makes "rockdirt.com" a RS? "livewire"?
Those sources are commonly used on Wikipedia, see WP:NEWSBLOG.

Not bad at all, will place on hold for a week pending changes/responses to above. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:34, 5 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your comments, The Rambling Man.--Earthh (talk) 22:27, 5 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, no problem. I linked the journal for the new reference you provided, but I'm satisfied with the article now. Good work. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:10, 6 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you :) Earthh (talk) 13:08, 6 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]