Talk:Weeds (Millennium)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 15:28, 1 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

OK, just a few issues:

Intro: 'neighbourhood' should be spelled 'neighborhood'
Intro: remove the semicolon after 'series'
Intro: "The episode begins with a quote from the Book of Jeremiah; and received mixed reviews, touching mostly on its interesting plot and poorly-executed characters." Rewrite into "The episode, which begins with a quote from the *Book of Jeremiah, received mixed reviews, with most reviews complimenting the interesting, but poorly-executed plot."
Plot: "Black also receives post containing a paint swatch with the number 528 on it, but it unsure of its meaning." Change to "Black also receives post containing a paint swatch with the number 528 on it, but he is unsure of its meaning."
Plot: "Comstock's son was returned after he revealed his affair, while Orlando's son was killed because he kept a crime involving money a secret" Commas after 'crime' and 'money'
Plot: I would remove the 'it was' in: "The boy is rescued, and killer is found and arrested—it was Edward Petey"

On hold for seven days to straighten out the issues.--Gen. Quon (talk) 17:30, 1 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I took your suggestions but tweaked some of them a little (diff). Thanks again for reviewing these articles. GRAPPLE X 07:07, 2 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

No problem! Everything looks in order. I pass.--Gen. Quon (talk) 18:03, 2 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]