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Reviewer: — Legolas (talk2me) 17:08, 4 June 2011 (UTC)
Doing... — Legolas (talk2me) 11:11, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
Comment A surprisingly good written article. My qualms:
Charts --> Arrange them alphabetically, and UK Rock Chart is not BBC Radio 1 Rock Chart. Link it to the correct name please.- Done.
Release hisoty section needs sources.- You're absolutely right. Done.
The Them and Music paras should come before the Promotion and release.- Fair enough, done.
- Increase the lead section. Its not exactly encompassing the article.
- Doing. It's kinda tougher on an article like this, as there are no great sales feats, chart successes or runaway singles to speak of. I'll see what I can muster up, mind you.
- The article should also talk about the commercial reception of the album.
- Could you explain what you mean a little, please? It mentions chart success and the only sales figure available.
- Sorry I should have been more explanatory. What I mean is that you have the commercial reception info in the Promotion and release section which I feel is wrong. Promotion and release talks about what Isis might have done to promote the album and what their label did for the release in different regions. But after release, its chart performance, sales, certifications etc is not their doings and hence it should not be a part of that section. So you can move that info out of that section to the "Reception" section. — Legolas (talk2me) 14:54, 9 June 2011 (UTC)
- Okay, that's totally reasonable. I've gone ahead and made that change. It's just the lead which remains now – any ideas as to what might be needed?
- I think you can summarize about the musical components more, rather than explaining just the Jungian principle. — Legolas (talk2me) 05:50, 10 June 2011 (UTC)
- Okay, that's totally reasonable. I've gone ahead and made that change. It's just the lead which remains now – any ideas as to what might be needed?
- Sorry I should have been more explanatory. What I mean is that you have the commercial reception info in the Promotion and release section which I feel is wrong. Promotion and release talks about what Isis might have done to promote the album and what their label did for the release in different regions. But after release, its chart performance, sales, certifications etc is not their doings and hence it should not be a part of that section. So you can move that info out of that section to the "Reception" section. — Legolas (talk2me) 14:54, 9 June 2011 (UTC)
- Could you explain what you mean a little, please? It mentions chart success and the only sales figure available.
These are some important points missing from the article, otherwise its a GA worthy on its own. As usual seven days to make the change. — Legolas (talk2me) 07:34, 9 June 2011 (UTC)
- Well, I've added a bit to the lead. Hopefully it further enlightens a little bit about the album's sound. Thanks for your review! Seegoon (talk) 11:54, 10 June 2011 (UTC)
- I just made a minor rearrangement to achieve balance between the two paras in the lead, but overall its fine to go I think. Happy to pass this as GA now. — Legolas (talk2me) 12:11, 10 June 2011 (UTC)