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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:35, 27 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Reasonable for me to take this on, as you have a lot of GANs pending currently! --K. Peake 08:35, 27 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Target Victor Victor to Victor Victor Worldwide per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • Introduce Lil Tjay as a fellow rapper
  • "of Andre Loblack." → "of Andre Loblack and solely handled production." since the following sentence is too short and can be merged like this
  • Target digital download to Music download
  • Target streaming to Streaming media
  • Wikilink bonus track
  • "Pop Smoke's second studio mixtape" → "Pop Smoke's second mixtape,"
  • Remove the exact release date because the release year is in brackets
  • "Pop Smoke and" → ""War" sees Pop Smoke and"

Background and composition

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  • "alongside Lil Tjay who" → "alongside Lil Tjay, who"
  • Wikilink 808Melo
  • Target programming to Programming (music)
  • Target mastered to Mastering (audio)
  • "the song while Fabian Marasciullo mixed the song" → "the song, while Fabian Marasciullo handled mixing" with the target
  • "Thomas McLaren who was" → "Thomas McLaren, who was"
  • Probably either mention the release was in the United States like the source backs up or add numerous citations to source a various release
  • "bonus track on Pop Smoke's second studio" → "bonus track on Pop Smoke's second" with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • ""War" is a" → "Musically, "War" is a"
  • "Michael Saponara states that" → "Michael Saponara stated that"
  • Mention that Saponara stated the croaky rhymes are from Pop Smoke and the high-pitched croon is from Lil Tjay; ask if you are confused about how to word this
  • ""high-pitched croon."" → ""high-pitched croon"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • "He continues, saying" → "He continued, saying"
  • "them disposed of."" → "them disposed of"."
  • "comments that the song" → "commented that the song"
  • Target chorus to Refrain
  • "and assertive bars."" → "and assertive bars"."
  • "they come through."" → "they come through"."

Reception

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  • Target music critics to Music journalism
  • ""stream-worthy single."" → ""stream-worthy single"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • "the song as "ominous."" → "the song as "ominous"."
  • "honeyed melodies," and" → "honeyed melodies", and"
  • "throughout the track."" → "throughout the track"."
  • "war-ready," while" → "war-ready", while"
  • "an explosive combination."" → "an explosive combination"."
  • The NME quote does not have a beginning for the speech marks
  • "a frenzied combination."" → "a frenzied combination"."

Music video

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  • "in black and white and features" → "in black and white, with it featuring"
  • Mention the website Torsten Ingvaldsen is from
  • ""lightly edited," and commented that the visual's" → ""lightly edited", and commented that its" per MOS:QUOTE
  • "mark transitions throughout."" → "mark transitions throughout"."
  • "was "sweet and simple."" → "is "sweet and simple"."
  • "to the masses."" → "to the masses"."

Credits and personnel

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  • Change writer to songwriter
  • programming should be last under Andre Loblack's credits

Charts

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  • Good

References

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Final comments and verdict

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Kyle Peake All the issues should be addressed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 23:10, 28 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The Ultimate Boss Thank you for having a go, I have pointed out above where things remain unaddressed. --K. Peake 05:59, 29 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The Ultimate Boss I can you have been active but not completed the fixes yet... please try to soon. --K. Peake 07:50, 29 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The Ultimate Boss ✓ Pass and I added the three remaining changes for you since they were only minor, but I advise you in the future to not ignore when reviewers mention you for only a few fixes because it is common practice to respond in scenarios like these where it's on your part to do so, especially when easy. --K. Peake 06:40, 30 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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