Talk:Walt Judnich/GA1

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 23:17, 8 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

1. Prose On hold

2. Verifiability On hold

3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass

4. Neutral ✓ Pass

5. Stable ✓ Pass

6. Illustrations ✓ Pass

7. Miscellaneous ✓ Pass

Comments

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"where he had a .274 batting average in 109 games." - Go ahead and link batting average here as the first mention in the prose. It's linked in the lead, but some users skim the lead, so it's not a bad idea to link at the first place in the prose, too.
" In 1937 he was again promoted to the Oakland Oaks of the Pacific Coast League" - Comma after 1937
"as well as his hitting in the clutch" - Go ahead and link to Clutch hitter, although that article is in horrible shape
"as well as his hitting in the clutch" - MOS:NUMERALS
" and promoted to Corporal in October" - I write a lot of MILHIST stuff, and generally ranks aren't capitalized unless they're used as a title (i.e. "Corporal Walt Judnich")
"nd a benefit game against players from the Pacific Coast League," - Link the PCL
"He split time between center field, right field, and first base" - Link right field
"He only played in ten games for the Pirates, and in May his contract was sold to the San Francisco Seals, ending his major league career." - What league? I'm assuming the PCL, but it should be stated outright
"and played in 25 before his contract was sold to the San Francisco Seals," - I'm assuming "games" goes after 25.

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"which included a batting average of .360 after the All-Star Game" - I didn't see this in the source, did I miss it?
" Judnich also finished 14th in MVP voting with 14 votes.[6]" - Source says he was 16th in the MVP voting
"He only played in ten games for the Pirates, and in May his contract was sold to the San Francisco Seals, ending his major league career." - [citation needed]
"Baseball in Wartime" appears to be the personal website of Gary Bedingfield, is Bedingfield a subject-matter expert?

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Placing on hold. Hog Farm (talk) 16:26, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Issues mostly fixed. for the .360 average it is in the gamelogs for that year, which is a little tricky to cite since you'd have to highlight the appropriate section to see it. To be safe im trying to find a news source that says that verbatim, if not I'll at least cite the log. For the baseball in wartime cite, Gary Bedingfield has written a couple published books on that specific subject, so im confident in his reliability at least (he was a keynote speaker for the World War II museum at one point per here, which cements it to me). If the website itself is the issue, since i can't directly find the site noted in other sources, i can replace the ref since I found the same stuff he wrote in the biography in other news articles (if there's something specific you'd like to show reliability I'll do my best to find that; I used the source a lot more on my other GAN so best I know now if it's not as reliable as I thought). Wizardman 17:12, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Looks like Bedingfield is a respected expert in the field, so the use of his site should be acceptable. Hog Farm (talk) 17:17, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Sounds good; I added in the game log ref so everything should be good now. Wizardman 21: 08, 9 June 2020 (UTC)