Talk:Wally's Cafe

pics

I took a picture and someone else apparently also had the same idea. Anyway, here they are.

Tduk (talk) 04:59, 13 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Wiki Education assignment: Online Communities

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 10 January 2023 and 18 April 2023. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): DovC123 (article contribs). Peer reviewers: Alise boal, JonNotJohn, NoahConstrictor, Anabellakb, Andrew34jack.

— Assignment last updated by Reagle (talk) 02:40, 2 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Page Overhaul

I am working on this page for a Capstone college project. I noticed some inaccuracies, and believe a complete overhaul - or at least a rearrangement of information - is necessary. I will be working in my sandbox.DovC123 (talk) 19:05, 31 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

UPDATE TO PAGE OVERHAUL

I have been given the green light to slowly move over the content of my sandbox to the Wally's Cafe main-page. I am more than happy to discuss any issues, questions or concerns you may have about this process.

DovC123 (talk) 19:14, 3 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

NoahConstrictor's Peer Review

Hi DovC123, I have made numerous copy edits to your live page, focusing mainly on punctuation, grammar, and consistency. I also left a few "invisible comments" which you should be able to see when editing the page. If you can not see these, let me know and I will send them to you directly.

One mistake I saw throughout was the inconsistent spelling of "Walcott." I believe that this is the correct spelling, but there were instances throughout where "Wallcott" was used, which I corrected.

I am glad I had the opportunity to review your article and I look forward to seeing you revise it. I can say I have a newfound interest in checking this location out! NoahConstrictor (talk) 17:08, 31 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Alise's Peer Review

Hi DovC123, this looks good! I made a few grammatical edits. I think the following paragraphs could use some citations, even if they're repeat citations:

"In only their first year, Sabby Lewis, whose local band was at the peak of their popularity, was one of the club's regular players. Amongst the musical regulars was saxophonist Jimmy Tyler, who organized popular Sunday jam sessions attended by up and coming artists and veterans alike.

Through the 1950’s, a steady core of local musicians showcasing a variety of jazz styles frequented Wally’s Paradise. Wally welcomed known artists Fat Man Robinson, Bunny Campbell, Art Foxall, Herbie and Roland Lee, Joe Perry, Stanley Trotman, Mabel Robinson, and drummer Alan Dawson. Jazz giants Bird, Lou Donaldson, Cannonball Adderley, and Duke Ellington all played at Wally’s at least once, making the venue one of Boston’s premiere jazz arenas."

I also recommend taking a look at your tone in the Impact on the Youth section. Make sure it's encyclopedic. Let me know if you have any questions about this!

I love this topic and thoroughly enjoyed reading! Alise boal (talk) 17:36, 31 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Patrick's Peer Review

Hi Dov, I'm very impressed that you were able to find an entirely new topic to add to Wikipedia! I guess the only suggestions I have essentially reiterate what Alise wrote. I think a few more in-text citations could be helpful if you can find them. I know it's difficult as this is such a niche topic but some more in-text citations regarding the man Wally's is named after and the famous artists that have attended in the past, may be helpful. Mr. Lestah (talk) 18:42, 4 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Andrew's Peer Review

This was an interesting read about Wally's Cafe, somewhere I've always walked past but never knew about. I made a few copy edits, and left a few templates. Overall, you've adhered to the main tenets of Wikipedia style writing which includes neutral point of view and an encyclopaedic tone. I think there are some areas of the article where more in-text citations are needed, and I've left a few citation templates as well. That would be the biggest thing to look out for. Other than that, great work! - Andrew34jack (talk) 23:39, 4 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

JonNotJohn's Peer Review

I really like the article, super informative! I think you’ll need to add citations to these sentences at least-- or at least edit for tone. I had a too enjoyable time reading these sentences for the Wikipedian monotone:

“Many notable musicians cited Wally’s as the location for their first ever live performance.”

“He set out to help these students reach their musical goals by providing them with opportunities in any way he could.”

“In the mid 1990’s, Wally’s suffered from overcrowding issues, flirting with occupancy limit on an almost nightly basis.”

Also for this sentence:

“Wally accumulated a multitude of honors from the likes of the City of Boston, Commonwealth of Massachusetts, and the Berklee College of Music.”

I would like to know the awards themselves, I care less about the organizations.

Great work!

JonNotJohn (talk) 17:50, 7 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]