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Nominator: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 17:33, 17 September 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Actuall7 (talk · contribs) 06:26, 16 October 2024 (UTC)
Hello, I would like to review this article. Actuall7 (talk) 06:26, 16 October 2024 (UTC)
initial checks
[edit]- The image is sourced properly.
- Earwig gives 5.7% of copyvio.
lead
[edit]- "United States, owned by Pensacola State College" -> "United States, which is owned by Pensacola State College"
- Should Florida and Alabama be linked in Pensacola, Florida, and Robertsdale/Mobile, Alabama?
- No. MOS:GEOLINK
- "Pensacola Junior College, and it provided" -> "Pensacola Junior College, where it provided"
History
[edit]- Escambia County, Florida should be linked
- "was among the last" -> "was among one of the last"
- Disagree: your proposed wording is too verbose, and I'd actually change in the opposite direction if I saw it at GAN.
- I see, thanks for clarifying.
- Disagree: your proposed wording is too verbose, and I'd actually change in the opposite direction if I saw it at GAN.
- "at Pensacola Junior College (PJC), and PJC would" maybe simplify to -> "at Pensacola Junior College which would"
- "Pensacola ETV system" -> what is ETV?
- Written out as "educational television"
- "a fourth-grade science class offered in 1968" -> "a fourth-grade science class that was offered in 1968"
- "NET was supplanted" and "DVS-capable PBS stations"-> what is NET and DVS?
- Fixed with acronym on first mention.
- Closed-circuit should be linked
- Disagree. Closed-circuit television is really about surveillance, which is the common meaning of the term these days, so it is not a suitable link target.
- Sorry, I suggested linking closed-circuit as I'm not too familiar with its meaning.
- Disagree. Closed-circuit television is really about surveillance, which is the common meaning of the term these days, so it is not a suitable link target.
References
[edit]- The Pensacola Journal, Pensacola News Journal, Press Register, NBC News, Federal Communications Commission, and Newspapers.com should be linked.
- I don't link Newspapers.com, even in FAs, so I don't think it's necessary. All publications now linked on first mention only (for News Journal, the first joint paper available). I also fixed some of the early joint papers to correctly render the masthead, which at the time was hyphenated. Comments to here: Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 08:04, 16 October 2024 (UTC)
- I see, should all the Pensacola News Journal sources be standardized to have a similar name? Actuall7 (talk) 08:31, 16 October 2024 (UTC)
- No, because the newspaper was printed differently in different years. This is not uncommon with newspapers that later merge but previously had joint editions of some sort. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 15:39, 16 October 2024 (UTC)
- Thanks for explaining, other than that, I don't see any other issues with the article as it is relatively short. Passing the article, good work. Actuall7 (talk) 00:25, 17 October 2024 (UTC)
- No, because the newspaper was printed differently in different years. This is not uncommon with newspapers that later merge but previously had joint editions of some sort. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 15:39, 16 October 2024 (UTC)
- I see, should all the Pensacola News Journal sources be standardized to have a similar name? Actuall7 (talk) 08:31, 16 October 2024 (UTC)
- I don't link Newspapers.com, even in FAs, so I don't think it's necessary. All publications now linked on first mention only (for News Journal, the first joint paper available). I also fixed some of the early joint papers to correctly render the masthead, which at the time was hyphenated. Comments to here: Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 08:04, 16 October 2024 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.