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Reviewer: RJaguar3 (talk · contribs) 15:56, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this article in the next couple of days. RJaguar3 | u | t 15:56, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking up this review! –Prototime (talk · contribs) 18:16, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
- The reference check and WP:WTW issues are based on a review of this revision. RJaguar3 | u | t 03:24, 18 February 2014 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it reasonably well written?
- A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
- Some grammar/spelling errors that need to be corrected: "which is desicribed Section 4(b)" in paragraph 3 of the lede should be "which is described in Section 4(b)"; "voter roles" in paragraph 5 of the "Background" section should be "voter rolls"; "Malcom X" is misspelled (paragraph 8 of "Background" section); "southern" should be capitalized in the last paragraph of "Legislative History: Original Bill: Senate", as it refers to the U.S. region; "en mass" in the "Impact" section, paragraph 3, should be "en masse"; "the Supreme Court upheld the provision Oregon v. Mitchell" should be "the Supreme Court upheld the provision in Oregon v. Mitchell";. The constitutional citation is usually not written "Article 1, Section III" ("Legislative History: Original Bill: Senate", paragraph 5); it should be written "Article I, section 3" (see this page on how to cite constitutions in Bluebook). Also, the terms "disfranchisement" and "disenfranchisement" appear to be used interchangeably; it may be better to stick with one term, the same holds for "black" and "African American". Also, in one of the case citations, the footnote appears between the case caption and the year, while the others have the date after the year.
- Done - also fixed "southern" elsewhere as appropriate. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 05:42, 10 January 2014 (UTC)
- See #Other notes.
- Done - also fixed "southern" elsewhere as appropriate. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 05:42, 10 January 2014 (UTC)
- Some grammar/spelling errors that need to be corrected: "which is desicribed Section 4(b)" in paragraph 3 of the lede should be "which is described in Section 4(b)"; "voter roles" in paragraph 5 of the "Background" section should be "voter rolls"; "Malcom X" is misspelled (paragraph 8 of "Background" section); "southern" should be capitalized in the last paragraph of "Legislative History: Original Bill: Senate", as it refers to the U.S. region; "en mass" in the "Impact" section, paragraph 3, should be "en masse"; "the Supreme Court upheld the provision Oregon v. Mitchell" should be "the Supreme Court upheld the provision in Oregon v. Mitchell";. The constitutional citation is usually not written "Article 1, Section III" ("Legislative History: Original Bill: Senate", paragraph 5); it should be written "Article I, section 3" (see this page on how to cite constitutions in Bluebook). Also, the terms "disfranchisement" and "disenfranchisement" appear to be used interchangeably; it may be better to stick with one term, the same holds for "black" and "African American". Also, in one of the case citations, the footnote appears between the case caption and the year, while the others have the date after the year.
- B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
- All are good except for WP:WTW; see #Criterion 1(b)
- A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- This criterion is satisfied
- B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- I did not find original research, but to the extent that I found sources not to support the claims referenced, those are also indicated in #Reference spot-check (Criterion 2(b))
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- Most major aspects are covered by the article. Whether or not the article includes information about the VRAA of 2014, this criterion is passed.
- B. Focused:
- 84 kilobytes of readable prose, according to prosesize.js. I don't think the article gets bogged down in excessive detail, so this is fine.
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- No problems here, especially given the topic of the article which can result in politically and racially charged discussion.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- On hold to allow the issues to be addressed.
- Pass or Fail:
I will continue the review after I get some of the books used as references in the article (which should be by this weekend). RJaguar3 | u | t 15:17, 9 January 2014 (UTC)
- If you need help with accessing sources, let me know and I'll see what I can do. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 05:55, 12 January 2014 (UTC)
Update
[edit]First of all, I would like to apologize for not getting the references checked in a timely manner. I think all of the books are in my local library, but I haven't had the chance to sit down and go through them. I should get this done today or tomorrow.
Second, the Voting Rights Amendment Act of 2014 was introduced this week. I do not know whether you want to update the article to reflect the VRAA before I review it or not; it is your call. If you don't want to review update it, I will still mark it as covering the major aspects of the article (criterion 3a) (see WP:GA?).
Thank you for your patience. RJaguar3 | u | t 19:27, 18 January 2014 (UTC)
- @RJaguar3: Thanks for the update and for your persistence in reviewing the article; I understand getting access to offline sources can be time consuming. I did see the VRAA of 2014 was introduced this week, but I haven't determined how best to integrate that fact into the article yet, so I may hold off a while longer (and it probably will only get a sentence or two tops until it starts to work its way through the legislative process). –Prototime (talk · contribs) 05:02, 19 January 2014 (UTC)
Hi RJaguar3, I was wondering if you've had any luck tracking down the offline sources over the past couple of weeks? Thanks. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 05:14, 1 February 2014 (UTC)
Prototime, I have finished the review and am placing the article on hold. Thanks again for your patience and your hard work in developing this important article; you can go ahead and ping me once you have addressed the issues. RJaguar3 | u | t 03:24, 18 February 2014 (UTC)
- Thank you for your thorough comments, RJaguar! This is fantastic feedback and well worth the wait. I especially appreciate you taking the time to point out ways to fix or enhance the article even though not required by the GA criteria. I will begin addressing the issues tomorrow. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 03:47, 18 February 2014 (UTC)
- One further note: I will work through what I can during the weekdays, but I have a loaded schedule this week, so I probably won't have time to address most of the issues until this weekend. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 04:48, 18 February 2014 (UTC)
@RJaguar3: I understand the 7-day hold period is about to expire, and I haven't quite finished addressing everything you've pointed out. But I am not far from completing things, and I'm confident that I can address all of the remaining issues this week. Would you be able to extend the hold period for an additional 7 days? I'd greatly appreciate it. And thanks again for the thorough review. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 05:47, 25 February 2014 (UTC)
- Sure, that is not a problem. RJaguar3 | u | t 14:16, 25 February 2014 (UTC)
- Great, thanks! –Prototime (talk · contribs) 05:20, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
RJaguar3, I believe I have addressed all of the outstanding issues. I'm happy to make any clarifications or address any further issues. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 07:39, 3 March 2014 (UTC)
Dead-link notes
[edit](these do not need to be fixed under WP:GA?, but these are provided for reference) [7] http://harvardlawreview.org/issues/123/november09/Leading_Case_6597.php (link to PDF on target page is broken)
- Done - I had to toy around with the URL, but I figured out the PDF's address and included it in the cite. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 05:33, 20 February 2014 (UTC)
Criterion 1(b)
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Introduction, paragraph 1 | "It is widely considered one of the most effective pieces of civil rights legislation ever enacted in the United States." | This is WP:WEASEL as written. However, it is referring to a source saying that "The Voting Rights Act itself has been called the single most effective piece of civil rights legislation ever passed by Congress." I would suggest adding in-text attribution to the United States Department of Justice: "According to the United States Department of Justice, the Voting Rights Act..." |
Background, paragraph 5 | "local election officials, who 'lost' records" | WP:SCAREQUOTES. I note that [18] (the source on which the paragraph is based) also uses scarequotes, suggesting that registrars pretended to lose records to hinder cases. Perhaps explicitly stating this instead is better? Alternatively, you could quote [18] directly, in which case WP:SCAREQUOTES does not apply. |
Background, paragraph 8 | "He gave a militant speech in which he noted that other civil rights leaders did not believe in King's nonviolent approach" | WP:SAY. Original quote (as printed in [24], p. 262) reads "the white people should thank Dr. King for holding people in check, for there are other [black leaders] who do not believe in these [nonviolent] measures." |
- Done with all three. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 05:17, 20 February 2014 (UTC)
Reference spot-check (Criterion 2(b))
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Introduction, paragraph 1 | "Congress later amended the Act five times to expand its protections." | This is not likely to be challenged (and is discussed in the body of the article), so no action is needed on this sentence to pass GA. I will note that [8] only lists four amendments (omitting 1992). [9] does not mention amendments.
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Introduction, paragraph 3 | "The most litigated special provision is Section 5" | I couldn't find the statistic in the citation.
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Background, paragraph 1 | "As initially ratified, the United States Constitution granted each state complete discretion to determine voting qualifications for its residents" | Possible original research; can you find a secondary source for this? I would suggest [23], p. 50, which I found while reference-checking.
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Background, paragraph 7 | "Following the 1964 elections, civil rights organizations such as the Southern Christian Leadership Conference (SCLC) and the Student Nonviolent Coordinating Committee (SNCC) worked to push for the passage of stronger federal legislation that would protect the voting rights of racial minorities despite the defiance of local officials." | I couldn't find this in [24], p. 258.
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Background, paragraph 8 | "'Letter From A Selma Jail', appeared in the New York Times." | Not GA-necessary, but I note this appears at the bottom of p. 262 in my copy of [24], not p. 263.
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Original bill: Senate, paragraph 1 | "the party could overcome a filibuster by a two-thirds vote if it remained united." | This is misleading. [23] makes no mention (I could find) of the possibility of overcoming a filibuster with Democrats alone. Indeed, as the rest of the paragraph illustrates, Republicans were approached to support the bill to prevent a Southern Democrat filibuster.
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Original bill: Senate, paragraph 1 | "After Mansfield and Dirksen introduced the legislation, 64 Senators agreed to cosponsor it." | This is unclear whether the VRA had 64 sponsors including Mansfield and Dirksen or 66 sponsors (Mansfield, Dirksen, and 64 others). [23] is not clear either; it states "Mansfield had hoped for at least fifty cosponsors, so he was pleased when sixty-four senators joined them [...] almost enough to invoke cloture" (p. 150).
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Original bill: Senate, paragraph 2 | first sentence | [18], p. 519 (and the first part of p. 520) is a reprint of South Carolina v. Katzenbach. To the extent you want to use the opinion as a source, it may be better to cite directly to the Supreme Court opinion. (not GA-necessary)
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Original bill: Senate, paragraph 3 | "Additionally, the bill included a "bail in" provision, under which federal courts could subject discriminatory non-covered jurisdictions to remedies contained in the special provisions." | I couldn't find a reference to bail-in (other than reopening a bailout judgment) in reference [27].
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Original bill: Senate, paragraph 5 | "Senator Strom Thurmond (R-SC) retorted that the bill would lead to 'tyranny and despotism'" | [23] (p. 154) says "[Southern die-hards] insisted that the bill, in Senator Strom Thurmond's words, would lead to 'despotism and tyranny'", the reverse order of the quote in the article.
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Original bill: Senate, paragraph 5 | "Senator Sam Ervin (D-NC) argued that the bill was unconstitutional because it deprived states of their right under Article I, Section 3 of the Constitution to establish voting qualifications." | [23] (p. 155) refers to "Article 1, Section 2", not Section 3.
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Original bill: Senate, paragraph 5 | "45 Democrats and 22 Republicans voting against it" | [23] (p. 156) says "Forty-two Democrats (including five southerners) voted no, and Dirksen was able to deliver twenty-two Republicans to join them."
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Original bill: Senate, paragraph 6 | "only Senators representing Southern states voted against it" | Not GA-necessary, but I note that the statement is sourced to [23] p. 161 in my version, not p. 160.
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Original bill: Conference committee | "This broke the logjam" | [23] (p. 167) reads "King's declaration broke the logjam", but the paraphrased sentence in the article does not cite [23] as a source.
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Amendments: 1970, paragraph 1 | "prior to 1970, covered jurisdictions made only 578 preclearance submissions" | I could not find this statistic in [27], the only source cited in the paragraph.
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Amendments: 1975, paragraph 3 | "Congresswoman Barbara Jordan (D-TX) successfully led an effort to amend the Voting Rights Act to protect language minorities." | I couldn't find this in [27].
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Amendments: 1982, paragraph 3 | "The decision had a major effect on voting rights litigation; lower courts overturned many judgments that had been previously entered in favor of plaintiffs, and civil rights organizations dropped many planned cases." | I couldn't find this in [46], p. 149
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Amendments: 2006, paragraph 1 | "Civil rights organizations advocated for the renewal and strengthening of the special provisions." | Probably not likely to be challenged, but I would like to point out that I couldn't find it at the given source and page ([51], p. 206)
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Amendments: 2006, paragraph 1 | "Furthermore, conservatives noted that the primary beneficiaries of the special provisions were African Americans, who overwhelmingly and increasingly voted for Democratic Party candidates." | Again, I could not find this in [51], p. 207.
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Amendments: 2006, paragraph 1 | "However, Republicans were receiving increasing support from some language minority groups, particularly Hispanics and Asian Americans, and they did not wish to risk losing that support by refusing to reauthorize the special provisions" | Could not find this in [51], p. 208
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Amendments: 2006, paragraph 3 | "One group of legislators, led by Congressman Lynn Westmoreland (R–GA), argued that the reauthorization unfairly targeted certain jurisdictions and continued to punish and stigmatize jurisdictions for long-past discrimination." | There is no source for this sentence. I tried looking at [55], the source for the following sentence, but Westmoreland was not there.
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Amendments: 2006, paragraph 4 | "However, in an unprecedented event for a bill that passed unanimously" | I couldn't find any mention at p. 178 of [52]. Perhaps it is implied by pp. 186 to 189, which supports the next passage.
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Provisions: General provisions: General prohibition of discriminatory voting laws, paragraph 1 | "The Supreme Court has allowed private plaintiffs to sue to enforce this prohibition" | There is a link to the published version of [59] at http://mckinneylaw.iu.edu/ilr/pdf/vol44p113.pdf. No action is required on this for GA status, though.
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Provisions: General provisions: General prohibition of discriminatory voting laws, paragraph 9 | "A plurality of the justices said that requiring such proof would violate Congress's intent to make Section 2 a "results" test, but Justice White maintained that the proof was necessary to show that the election scheme resulted in racial discrimination." | The citation is to [79], pp. 355-357. Did you mean pp. 555-557?
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Note c | "The Court of Appeals for the Second Circuit has held that challenges to majority-vote requirements under Section 2 are not cognizable, while the Eastern District of Arkansas held the opposite." | In the citation, did you mean [18], pp. 752-753?
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Provisions: General provisions: Specific prohibitions, paragraph 2 | "Section 11(d) prohibits voting twice in a federal election." | Section 11(d) as enacted reads "Whoever, in any matter within the jurisdiction of an examiner or hearing officer knowingly and willfully falsifies or conceals a material fact, or makes any false, fictitious, or fraudulent statements or representations, or makes or uses any false writing or document knowing the same to contain any false, fictitious, or fraudulent statement or entry, shall be fined not more than $10,000 or imprisoned not more than five years, or both." Are you referring to section 11(e) (42 USC 1973i(e))?
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Provisions: General provisions: Bail in, paragraph 3 | "several of them, such as New Mexico, have since had their bail-in status lifted" | I couldn't find a clear statement about New Mexico's bail-in status being lifted in [95]. The closest I could find was that New Mexico entered into a consent decree in 1984 requiring preclearance for a decade, and the Attorney General objected to its 1991 redistricting.
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Provisions: General provisions: Bail in, paragraph 3 | "As of 2013, 17 jurisdictions remained subject to bail-in." | There are 18 jurisdictions listed on 1a-3a under the title "Jurisdictions That Have Been Ordered by a District Court to Comply With Preclearance Requirement Pursuant to Bail-in Mechanism in Section 3(c) of the Voting Rights Act". There is no indication in the brief that all 18 jurisdictions remained subject to preclearance as of 2013.
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Provisions: General provisions: Bail in, paragraph 3 | "additional jurisdictions may be bailed in." | Source [98] is hosted on Yahoo! News, not NPR, as stated in the reference. (Not GA-necessary to fix this.)
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Provisions: General provisions: Bail in, paragraph 4 | "Under this provision, the District Court for DC may certify a non-covered jurisdiction to receive federal observers if the court determines that the jurisdiction violated the voting rights guaranteed by the Fourteenth or Fifteenth Amendments." | According to [100], any federal court is allowed to appoint observers, not just the United States District Court for the District of Columbia.
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Provisions: Special provisions: Coverage formula, paragraph 2 | "The types of jurisdictions that the coverage formula applies to include states and "political subdivisions" of states, which includes local governments that register people to vote (usually counties)." | I could only find this alluded to in [94]; can you find a better (more directly stated) source for this definition?
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Reference [106] (cited in note d) | "Hathorn v. Lavorn" | The correct case name (as appears in [18]) is Hathorn v. Lovorn
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Provisions: Special provisions: Federal examiners and observers, paragraph 3 | "By 2006, the federal examiner provision was used solely as a means to appoint federal observers." | The page in [100] is 239, not 238 (not GA-necessary).
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Provisions: Special provisions: Federal examiners and observers, paragraph 3 | "The goal of the federal observer provision is to facilitate minority voter participation by deterring and documenting instances of discriminatory conduct in the election process, such as denying qualified minority persons the ability to cast a ballot, intimidation or harassment voters on election day, or improper vote counting" | Check the page number. (not GA-necessary)
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Provisions: Special provisions: Federal examiners and observers, paragraph 3 | "Since 1965, the Attorney General has certified 164 jurisdictions to receive federal observers, including 11 states and 153 local governments." | I don't think this correctly interprets [116]. The 11 states mentioned appear to be states where at least one county was certified for federal observers, not a list of states that have been certified for federal observers in their entirety. It would be more accurate to say "The Attorney General has certified 153 counties in 11 states to receive federal observers."
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Provisions: Special provisions: Federal examiners and observers, paragraph 3 | "Given time and resource constraints, federal observers are not appointed to every certified jurisdiction for every election." | The page number is wrong; the sentence can be sourced by p. 230 (not GA-necessary)
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Provisions: Special provisions: Bail out, paragraph 4 | "Between this date and 2013, 196 jurisdictions bailed out of coverage through 38 bailout actions; in each instance, the Attorney General consented to the bailout request." | Not GA-necessary, but the {{rp}} template appears to have gotten caught in the reference.
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Provisions: Special provisions: Bail out, paragraph 4 | "Between 1984 and 2009, all jurisdictions that bailed out were located in Virginia." | For accuracy, this sentence should use August 5, 1984 (the date of the amendment) as the starting date, as three non-Virginia jurisdictions bailed-out in 1984 before August.
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Provisions: Special provisions: Bilingual election requirements, list of elements after paragraph 2 | "A single language minority is present that has an English illiteracy rate higher than the national average; and [e]ither: The number of 'limited-English proficient' members of the language minority group is at least 10,000, or it comprises at least 5% of the jurisdiction's population..." | This should be rewritten to refer to voting-age citizens as per the source, [94].
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Impact, paragraph 2 | "Starting in the 1970s, the Attorney General commonly interposed Section 5 preclearance objections to dilutive annexations, redistricting plans, and election methods such as at-large election systems, runoff election requirements, and prohibitions on bullet voting. In total, 81% (2,541) of precleareance objections made between 1965 and 2006 were based on vote dilution grounds" | The page number does not exist in [108]. The first sentence can be sourced to pp. 105-106. Where did you find the statistic cited in the second sentence?
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Impact, paragraph 3 | "with the Republican Party controlling most of Southern politics." | Not GA-necessary, as the statement is unlikely to be challenged, but I couldn't find this in [23] at p. 203.
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Other notes
[edit]- "Section 5 and most other special provisions apply to jurisdictions encompassed by the Act's 'coverage formula', which is described Section 4(b)": "described" still needs to be changed to "described in"
- Done - and swapped "described" with "prescribed", as I figure that's more accurate considering it's a legal requirement. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 05:55, 20 February 2014 (UTC)
- "new jurisdictions may come into coverage while others may have their coverage termination": "termination" should be "terminated"
- Done –Prototime (talk · contribs) 05:45, 22 February 2014 (UTC)
- bail-in and bail-out terminology (especially hyphenation) needs to be consistent.
- Done I made some changes and I think I've fixed this now, but feel free to let me know if you think it's incorrect. This is what I've done:
- Concerning "bailout", when used as a noun or adjective (e.g., "bailout procedure"), I've kept it as one word, since "bailout" is a common noun.source When used as a verb, I've spelled it out as two words (e.g., "allow a local government to bail out of coverage"). source And I've dropped the hyphen entirely, except where the term is being used as an adjective in the past tense (e.g., "bailed-out jurisdiction"), since it is a compound adjective
- Concerning "bail in", there is no single-word noun like there is for "bailout", so to indicate its status as a singular concept when using it as a noun or adjective, I've spelled it with the hyphen "bail-in". Where used as a verb, I've dropped the hyphen (analogous to the verb "bail out"). –Prototime (talk · contribs) 07:21, 3 March 2014 (UTC)
- Done I made some changes and I think I've fixed this now, but feel free to let me know if you think it's incorrect. This is what I've done:
- Some references use {{rp}}; others put the page number in the reference footnote. Consistency in this would improve the article.
- Done - All references should now use {{rp}}. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 07:30, 3 March 2014 (UTC)
Listed
[edit]All issues have been fixed, so I am listing this article as a good article. Congratulations to Prototime and all the other contributors for their efforts in developing and improving the article, and I hope to see this article appear on the main page as a featured article in the future. RJaguar3 | u | t 23:59, 3 March 2014 (UTC)
- Fantastic! Thank you, RJaguar3! I am deeply appreciative of your dedication in reviewing this article. Thank you for taking the time to find the offline and paywall sources and in offering such a comprehensive review. It's been a pleasure working with you! I, too, hope to see this article appear on the main page in the future. –Prototime (talk · contribs) 03:38, 4 March 2014 (UTC)