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Don't Vandalize.

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Regardless of your stance on the incidents regarding Burfict, keep your own personal conceptions and opinions out of it. If you feel the need to do so in an encyclopedic manner, fine, as long as it brings something to the argument. Vandalize the page with non-encyclopedic personal attacks and the like, and your edit will be deleted or altered to bring it up to an encyclopedic status.

On behalf of the Wikipedia editing community, MTG1989 talk 05:44, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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Questionable tone

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"Although Burfict has established himself as one of the most feared linebackers in the NFL,[12] he surprisingly carries a friendly and honest persona in the locker room as well as a clean legal record since his entry to the league"

I might be crazy, but this doesn't seem like an unbiased passage. 108.70.12.24 (talk) 23:47, 13 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Semi-Protect This Article, Please

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An editor should semi-protect this article as soon as possible.

It is being vandalized.

209.212.5.67 (talk) 23:54, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

 Done Eagles 24/7 (C) 00:47, 1 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

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Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:08, 29 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:33, 28 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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A lot of comma and tidying work to do. References could use more metadata, and some seem lost to time, unfortunately. You will want to run IABot when it comes back and I may even have to pass the page conditional on a later bot run if it is still down. 7-day hold to Newtothisedit. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:53, 28 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes

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Items labeled (C in S) refer to User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences.

A general observation: a surprisingly high number of paragraphs don't end in inline citations. If you want this at DYK after GA, that's a must to fix.

Lead

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  • Burfict was a projected top pick in the 2012 NFL Draft, until an unimpressive NFL Combine performance and character concerns led to him not being selected. Remove comma (C in S)
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High school

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  • a CIF title, a state championship with the help of quarterback Taylor Martinez, This makes it seem like a CIF title is not the same thing as a state championship. Reword as "CIF state championship with the help of..."
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  • "Burfict missed almost all of his sophomore season due to academic problems." Why is this after the junior section? It should be combined with that paragraph, with this coming first.
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  • Burfict's rivalry with quarterback Matt Barkley, which would continue into their college days began in high school in a game against Barkley's Mater Dei High School, in which Burfict made hits aimed at Barkley's knees that Barkley would later describe at dirty, ironically both Burfict and Barkley were committed to USC when the incident occurred. This sentence is a ramblin' wreck! Commas, run-ons, typos, etc. And a use of "ironically", something I detest on Wikipedia. Try Burfict's rivalry with quarterback Matt Barkley, which would continue into their college days, began in high school. In a game against Barkley's Mater Dei High School, Burfict made hits aimed at Barkley's knees that Barkley would later describe as dirty. Both Burfict and Barkley were committed to USC when the incident occurred.
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College

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  • Burfict originally committed to USC, but eventually switched to Arizona State on National Signing Day. Remove comma (C in S)
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  • to meet admission standard should be plural admission standards
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  • Burfict did qualify on time for the 2009 football season. Have you a citation here?
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  • By midseason, Burfict ranked second on the team with 30 tackles despite starting only three of six games, and had Remove comma (C in S)
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  • and was named a Freshman All-American by College Football News, and by the Football Writers Association of America. Remove the comma and the "by". Maybe move both cites to the end.
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  • He was also honored as the Pacific-10 Conference Defensive Freshman of the Year. Cite me, please!
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  • In a game against Stanford, Burfict was called for grabbing the facemask of Doug Baldwin, and—after complaining to the referee—charged with a personal foul Remove the last comma (C in S)
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  • team leading hyphenate
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  • first 1st team change to "first first-team"...cite needed this sentence
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  • Burfict was expected to take over as the leader of the Sun Devils defense in 2011, but eventually had a rather inconsistent junior season. Remove comma (C in S)
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Professional career

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  • Hyphenate "first-round" as an adjective (and "seventh round" later in this section) and "off-the-field" as one too. You might want to do some find and replace to find "off the field" and "on the field" and hyphenate it when used as an adjective (issues off the field, off-the-field issues).
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  • as 20th best prospect → "as the 20th-best prospect"
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    • MOS:INOROUT — this quote is not a complete sentence, so quote before period.
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  • Add "he" before "noted" to avoid this C in S issue; rather do this because of sentence length.
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  • Burfict's draft stock would continue to slide with a poor showing at the NFL Scouting Combine, where he performed the majority of drills, but skipped the short shuttle and three-cone drills after injuring his hamstring on his second 40-yard dash attempt. Remove the second comma and get a citation.
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  • On April 25, 2012, it was reported by Fox Sports insider Jay Glazer multiple add a "that" after Glazer
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  • Hyphenate "ninth-best" and "tenth-best"
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  • The Cincinnati Bengals finished second in the AFC North with a 10–6 record and earned a wildcard berth. On January 5, 2013, Burfict started his first career playoff game and recorded six combined tackles during the Bengals’ 13–19 loss at the Houston Texans in the AFC Wildcard Game. Citation please? Also, "Wild Card" is two words in the NFL.
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  • as the teams starting that's "team's" with a possessive. this recurs twice in the paragraph
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  • Browns’ running back no possessive here. This occurs several times throughout the rest of the article (plural team name + position).
 Done Believe I fixed all of these but might have missed one.
  • Burfict sustained a concussion while sacking Ravens' quarterback Joe Flacco during the Bengals' season-opening 23–16 victory at the Baltimore Ravens. Redundant Ravens. Remove the first instance.
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  • concussion related hyphenate
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  • 30-yards un-hyphenate
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  • On August 30, 2017, Burfict appealed the suspension, and ultimately reduced the suspension to three games. Add "the NFL" or "the league" after the "and"
 Done Added the league
  • Burfict's was ejected Remove stray possessive
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  • On January 8, 2018, the Cincinnati Bengals announced their decision to hire Teryl Austin as the new defensive coordinator, who was previously the defensive coordinator for the Detroit Lions. Move the appositive (who was...Detroit Lions) to after "Austin".
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  • "Leagues'" should be "league's"
  • During Week 4 against the Indianapolis Colts, Burfict made a helmet-to-helmet hit on Jack Doyle, and was ejected from the game. Remove the second comma (C in S)
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  • Three days earlier, on October 6, the NFL notified Burfict that it discovered another illegal hit against the Colts when he made a helmet-to-helmet hit against Colts running back Nyheim Hines, although no penalty was called during that time. some tweaks: Three days earlier, on October 6, the NFL had notified Burfict that it discovered another illegal hit against in the game when he made a helmet-to-helmet hit against Colts running back Nyheim Hines, although no penalty was called at that time.
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  • Since then, Burfict indicated add a "has" after "Burfict"
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Personal life

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  • His mother, a city transit bus driver, initially raised Burfict and his older half-brother DaShan Miller (b. 1986) on her own, but eventually remarried and moved to Corona Remove the last comma.
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  • Corona Centennial High School, and later Remove comma (C in S)
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  • Miller was eligible for the 2010 NFL Draft, but he went undrafted. Cite me!
 Done Couldn't find direct source for this although by NFL draft rules he was eligible and went undrafted. Decided to remove this detail.
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  • Are there any updates on this case?
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  • He was released from jail, the same day on a $1,000 bond. Remove the comma here.
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Sourcing and spot checks

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Some notes:

  • The SBNation articles included are from staff writers. Consider adding the writers to the citation templates. There are a lot of news articles missing this kind of info!
 Done Added writers and dates to all references that had said information. Replaced dead links.
  • There is a dead YouTube video reference, [32]. I suspect [33] might cover the material.
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  • I strongly suggest archiving all references, particularly as I found two dead links!, but IABot is not properly functioning at this time. I may ping you later to suggest this.

Earwig turned up two sites copying us, which can be safely tossed. Other sources mostly are flagged for formulations and proper nouns like "in the 2009 U.S. Army All-American" and "season-high 11 tackles (three solo)".

For spot checks, 12 (10%) of the 121 references were selected at random. 15, 17, 39, 57, 68, 84, 94, 97, 106, 112, 117, 119

  • [15] — USA Today Super 25 shows Centennial at No. 24.
  • [17] — The link is dead. A version from 2008 [1] is saved, but it has Burfict at #2. I'm presuming he was bumped up to #1 at some point. This may be lost to time. Does an RS mention his #1 ranking with Rivals?
 Done Linked rivals rankings that have him at #1
  • [39] — Pauline's quote is verified. This is also a saved dead link [2].
  • [57] — NFL player stats. The site seems to be something broken right now for some reason, but I can't blame you for that. The URL also changed.
  • [68] — Lists Burfict as starting LB.
  • [84] — SBNation article on the two unsportsmanlike penalties to cost them the game.
  • [94] — Deadspin article. I think this is fine.
  • [97] — NFL.com article on Burfict's ejection.
  • [106] — NFL.com article on the four-game suspension for PEDs.
  • [112] — Six tackles (but it's in the Box Score section).
  • [117] — Checks out. Presumably nothing more has been said since.
  • [119] — Checks out. In their hometown of Corona, DaShan starred in high school, eventually playing wide receiver at UTEP and Akron

Other items

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  • The images are all freely licensed, but none of them have alt text. It's not strictly a GA requirement, but it's one that I poke the bear on so that people learn of it.
    •  Done I think I did this correctly but this is my first time adding alt tex so I could have made a mistake.
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