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Reviewer: Hurricane Noah (talk · contribs) 03:19, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply] 

Will do. NoahTalk 03:19, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • I see boxes for the Parthian translation. Is this some kind of WP issue?
Dunno. I see boxes as well on my Macbook, but not on my desktop computer. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "with the Romans by deposing appointing Parthamasiris" Could you please fix this?
Oops, fixed. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "A suggestion has been made that the name could mean "strength"." This doesn't seem very strong since it doesn't mention who is making the suggestion. I feel it could be worded in a way that makes it sound more reliable.
Added the name of the historian who suggested it. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "an Parthian contender" Should just be "a"
Fixed. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "between Vologases III and Osroes" Osroes I
Fixed. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • I would avoid starting sentences with years in the middle of paragraphs as it chops off the flow of the prose
Hmm, not sure what to do about this. Suggestions? --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:52, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
You could incorporate it mid-sentence or at the end like "In 147, Vologases III was succeeded by Mithridates V's son Vologases IV" --> Vologases III was succeeded by Mithridates V's son Vologases IV in 147 NoahTalk 14:55, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I think I've done it. What do you think? --HistoryofIran (talk) 15:04, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Just to make it more clear as to which city is the capital, could you reword "Trajan captured Seleucia and Ctesiphon, the capital of the Parthians" to "Trajan captured Ctesiphon, the capital of the Parthians, as well as Seleucia" ?
From my understanding they both functioned as Parthian capitals. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Could you please clarify that both were capitals then? NoahTalk 14:40, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Ops, I need glasses - there we go :). --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:45, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and the Armenians under a certain Sanatruk causing the Romans problems" issues with this portion of the sentence
What about now? --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
That looks much better. NoahTalk 14:40, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Vologases III also faced new challenges other places" --> in other places
Fixed. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Pluralize economic cost
Fixed. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Under Hadrian's successor" comma after that
Fixed. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "disturbance once occurred in Armenia due to the Romans appointing a new king in Armenia" --> "a disturbance occurred after the Romans appointed a new king in Armenia"
Fixed. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Could you please vary the sides of the article in which images are posted?
Done. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:30, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Lastly, could you please add in alternate text for the images?
Done. --HistoryofIran (talk) 14:52, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Mainly decent, but you have to watch for typos and verb tense errors. NoahTalk 03:48, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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