Talk:Vol. 3: (The Subliminal Verses)/GA1

GA Review

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Resolution of cover art images should be lowered if possible, they're a bit big.
- Just so I'm clear on this, what is an acceptable resolution? REZTER ^TALK ø 10:59, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - This image had a 240x240 version uploaded. I haven't checked if it's the same thing, but something that size would be good (and for the other image, obviously). giggy _(:O) 01:09, 23 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 01:45, 23 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Check italics for ref publishers like Metal Hammer (sometimes it is; sometimes it isn't) (and there are others, check all).
- Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 21 ([1]) publisher is Allmusic.
- Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 25 publisher is charts.org.nz (note the nz)
- Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
In Professional reviews, AMG shouldn't have italics. And Stylus mag should?
- Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
'Also lead vocalist Corey Taylor drank heavily throughout their time in The Mansion, "I would drink from the moment I got up until the moment I passed out."' - don't start sentences with "also"... needs reword.
- Reworded, check it out. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Jordison explained that they had wrote more than enough" - wrote --> written?
- Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:20, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Though many songs, such as "Pulse of the Maggots" and "Before I Forget",[12] use the band's usual "pounding metal" style." - should this have been merged with the previous sentence?
- Done REZTER ^TALK ø 12:53, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The Musical and lyrical themes section is a lot of quoting. Use your own words, based on the reviews, rather than quoting - that's why there's a reception section.
- OK man, I rewrote it, check it out. REZTER ^TALK ø 14:18, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"ohnny Loftus of Allmusic, wrote the album" - why the comma? (This is common throughout.)
- I tidied up some of the prose. REZTER ^TALK ø 14:39, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"with "Before I Forget" from the album" - I don't think you need the last three words.
- Done. REZTER ^TALK ø 11:26, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Please leave me a note when done. Cheers, giggy _(:O) 10:34, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

More comments below. giggy _(:O) 01:09, 23 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

"Similar to their previous albums the lyrics include strong use of metaphors and touches upon themes including anger, disaffection and psychosis." - doesn't sound good starting a sentence with "similar"... just talk about what's on this album, then perhaps mention that it's similar to something else.
- Removed. Black ngold29 01:32, 23 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"being labelled as including "stately vocal harmonies"" - by who?
- Accredited. Black ngold29 01:32, 23 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]