Talk:Vladimir Teplyakov/GA1

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Reviewer: Materialscientist (talk) 07:03, 30 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

To start the review

It is great that you wrote an article on that person, but to become a GA, in my view it needs much more content. Whereas there are no strict guidelines on the length of GA, this is biography and there is lot of pertinent information which could and should be added. (Born .. where? in what kind of family? studied where? what? Then the war .. awarded Order of Glory for what? He got medal for the Capture of Vienna, thus apparently went there? How about personal life, married? children? Still alive? etc, etc)
Technical details need to be wikilinked and/or briefly explained. "co-author of Linear Accelerators of Ions" - is a journal or book, translated? "Radio frequency quadrupole" is jargon, which is not very clear even to me, and thus needs some explanation. For 99% readers, cavities would associate with teeth, not with resonators.
"From 1959–1966" is unclear. From 1959 to 1966? or the starting year is uncertain to that wide range?
"For the rest of his life, Teplyakov continued to work at IHEP" - till the age of 84? Materialscientist (talk) 07:03, 30 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I agree with the above, and since there has been no work done in a few weeks, it should be failed at GAN. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 14:36, 21 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I hoped to initiate the improvement process. Those comments are not a complete GA review, and thus if the article is renominated, more could be added, but for now, I have to fail this GAN. Sorry. Materialscientist (talk) 00:29, 22 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]