Talk:Virginia Mae Brown/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:04, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "became an assistant to Attorney General John G. Fox, becoming " became, becoming repetitive.
•  Done

• "Attorney General John G. Fox," link(s)?
•  Done

• "insurance commissioner" what's one of those?
•  Done

• "(married April 8, 1955)[2]" this could be mentioned in the prose, not just the infobox, and thus referenced there too.
•  Done

• Likewise, her parents could be mentioned in the prose as well.
•  Done

• No need for "(November 13, 1923 – February 15, 1991)" in Early life section, just say when she was born at that point, as part of the running prose.
•  Done

• "Bachelor of Arts" could link.
•  Done

• "became an assistant to Attorney General John G. Fox," links?
•  Done

• "West Virginia's governor" link?
•  Done

• "Insurance Commissioner" this wasn't capitalised in the lead, which is correct?
•  Done = lower case

• "becoming the first female insurance commissioner" repetitive. And what is one of those?
•  Done = public official

• Could link UN.
•  Done

• "ended in divorce.[when?][4]" this has been tagged.
•  Done = researched this and no sources say a date. They just say that the marriage ended in a divorce.

• "700-acre" convert.
•  Done

• "Brown was a member of the Presbyterian Christian faith.[2]" that could easily slip into the Personal life section.
•  Done

• "James V. Brown" Vernon.
•  Done

• "1944–52" etc, year ranges need to include full years per MOS, unless consecutive or limited space, neither of which applies here.
•  Done

• "1935-current" en-dash.
•  Done

• "AncestoryLibrary.com" websites are normally italicised.
•  Done

• "Clarksburg Sunday Exponent-Telegram" that's a work.

 Done = tried "work" - but it red-lined giving me More than one of |work= and |website= specified. so set back to "publisher" = no red line!

• "LA Times.com. L.A. Times. " don't think you need both, I'd just stick with Los Angeles Times.

 Done

• Second biblio, looks like it should have "Yearbook" included in the title.

 Done

That's all I have on the first reading. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:18, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

• Thanks for the first reading. I'll start working on the issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:22, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
• @The Rambling Man: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:27, 29 August 2021 (UTC)