Talk:Virgil Brennan/GA1

GA Review

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GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
The picture is excellent, but needs to be placed on the right-hand side so as not to cut into the heading of the section under it.
It doesn't cut into the following heading on my screne, but I can move it up a little if you wish. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 03:28, 8 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

'Flying Supermarine Spitfires, the party took off from the aircraft carrier HMS Eagle' - My Malta history isn't so hot, but didn't they have to fight their way through some Axis aircraft to land?
Nothing mentioned in my sources. Though, the Axis' major aerial attack commenced the following month. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 03:28, 8 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"contend with fatigue and inadequate rations while battling the enemy's superior forces" - Is this from the source cited at the end of the next sentence? If not, it needs its own citation.
Same source. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 03:28, 8 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

'Brennan scored further victories on 10 May' - What were these victories?
Aerial victories; now clarified. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 03:28, 8 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Can Hesselyn or Bateson be wikilinked?
Batson done, but Hesselyn does not have an article so I didn't link him, though I can if you wish. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 03:28, 8 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

'During this time, Brennan shared his combat experiences with his fellow pilots' - This is unclear. Do you mean he spoke to them about his experiences, or 'experienced' them as in fought alongside them?
Clarified. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 03:28, 8 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

An excellent article, which only needs a few things tended to before I'll pass it as GA-Class. Skinny87 (talk) 13:00, 7 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, Skinny; I really appreciate it. Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 03:28, 8 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Well, everything but the photo is done, and I guess that's just my web browser, so I'll pass this now. Congrats! Skinny87 (talk) 19:19, 8 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]