This article is within the scope of WikiProject Crime and Criminal Biography, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of Crime and Criminal Biography articles on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.Crime and Criminal BiographyWikipedia:WikiProject Crime and Criminal BiographyTemplate:WikiProject Crime and Criminal BiographyCrime-related articles
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Law, an attempt at providing a comprehensive, standardised, pan-jurisdictional and up-to-date resource for the legal field and the subjects encompassed by it.LawWikipedia:WikiProject LawTemplate:WikiProject Lawlaw articles
This article is within the scope of WikiProject United States, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of topics relating to the United States of America on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the ongoing discussions.
This article is within the scope of WikiProject United States Constitution, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of the Constitution of the United States on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.United States ConstitutionWikipedia:WikiProject United States ConstitutionTemplate:WikiProject United States ConstitutionUnited States Constitution articles
The first two sentences should probably be combined to avoid the awkward "Thus" at the start of the second. I'd suggest "In murder cases arising from the Indian Territory, Navassa Island, and the No Man's Land of the Oklahoma Panhandle, the Supreme Court has held that the Vicinage Clause places no limits on the prosecution of crimes committed outside the territory of a state."
The next three sentences could be combined into one paragraph. Actually, the whole section could if you wanted to.
In the sentence on incorporation, preface it with whether the Supreme Court has ruled on the subject (I assume it hasn't, since you're citing circuit courts).
In "The perfect crime?", "lightly-populated" does not require a hyphen. Also, I'd spell out "Prof.", but that's purely aesthetic.
Just in terms of broadness of coverage: have you scene any other journal articles about the clause? Does your Con Law book mention it at all? I'm sure it's not that well-covered, but anything else would certainly be nice, if it exists. --Coemgenus (talk) 19:46, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I hope my recent edits have remedied your concerns. As to combining the sentences in the paragraph, I prefer to divide this section by the terms at issue. I also prefer no to say "The Supreme Court has not ruled on this." The Supreme Court has held that the jury right is incorporated against the states; it is ambiguous whether those cases also incorporated the vicinage clause. The three circuit court cases considered this and concluded that the vicinage right was not incorporated. I'd prefer to let that speak for itself. Savidan02:06, 5 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I am a bit puzzled by the explanation of the SSRN link removal (“I prefer not to link to a preliminary draft; it may confuse readers when they are unable to find the material at the page cited”). You mean the full text provided at SSRN differs significantly from the referenced Georgetown Law Journal, even though SSRN suggests a citation of “Kalt, Brian C., The Perfect Crime. Georgetown Law Journal, Vol. 93, No. 2. Available at SSRN: http://ssrn.com/abstract=691642”? (I am in no way implying you are wrong, I am just curious; I have arrived to this article after reading the article on SSRN.) I still believe providing the link at least with a disclaimer (something like “preliminary draft available at …”) would be a service to readers. --Mormegil (talk) 23:11, 22 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I don't know whether the draft is final or not for sure, but usually when there is a final version on SSRN, it looks like it is out of the actual journal with a cover page. Even if it is word-for-word final, the pagination is not the same as the journal (which makes me doubt that it is final). Savidan23:15, 22 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]