Talk:Venus (Lady Gaga song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:25, 23 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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The song also includes a sample from the French → The recording also includes a sample from French
album, Interstellar Low Ways (1966). Sun Ra was thus given a co-writing → album, Interstellar Low Ways (1966), thus receiving a co-writing
- I wrote it a little differently.
after the positive reception → following the positive reception
four hooks and references → four hooks, and references
same named planet → same-named planet
Three different artworks were done by Steven Klein → Three accompanying artworks were designed for the single by Steven Klein
but never materialized, instead the track was later used during a sequence in the music video for Artpop's third single, "G.U.Y." → but was never materialized, with the track being later used during a sequence in the music video for Artpop's third single, "G.U.Y." instead.
attained moderated success → attained moderate success
on charts around the world → on worldwide charts
Gaga performed the song → You've already used "song" before; alternate here with "recording"
performances happened at → performances occurred at

Infobox

One of three covers released alongside the track. → One of the three covers used to digitally commercialize the track.
Unlink Lady Gaga the second time

Background and development

No full names please
her second one → her second record
In the meantime Gaga → state "the singer" here for alternation
French DJ → French disc jockey
the same named → the same-named
on a journey... I kinda → ... to [...]
groove. (...) This song → (...) to [...]

Recording and composition

Madeon noted: "She would → : to ,
for the song → alternate here with "track"
Madeon and worked on → Madeon, and handled (word rep.)
mastered the song → alternate here with "track"
delivery is similar → delivery are similar
finally it reaches the chorus → finally the chorus is reached
euphoria" with Gaga belting the lyrics: "When → euphoria", with Gaga belting the lyrics, "When
and the song follows → alternate here with "the recording"

Release and artwork

purchase on Monday October 28, 2013 → Stating that it was a Monday is overfluous
to the release Gaga release three cover → to the release, the singer unveiled
sees Gaga also standing naked → use "her" here for alternation
collaborated with Gaga on interludes → alternate with "the singer" here
This was followed by a shot → This is followed by a shot

Critical reception

describing it as "catchy" → remove "as"
positive review to the song → alternate "song" with "track" here
commented that with the song packing → commented that, with the song incorporating
glittering dance balladry → close the quote from Idolator here.
as one of the songs audience can download → as one of the tracks the audience can download
gave the song 3 stars out of 5 rating → gave the song a rating of 3 stars out of 5
and called the song "almost parodical" → alternate here with "recording"

Chart performance

copies of digital downloads → digital copies
- I would disagree that the verbiage present is correct.
Australia and New Zealand respectively → comma before "respectively"
of the album pre-order → of the album's pre-order
top-ten of the download → the top 10 of the download
and top-ten of the main → and the top 10 of the main
This enabled the song → alternate here with "track"

Live performances

Two weeks later Gaga performed → Set comma before "Gaga"
Gaga went barefoot → Alternate with "the singer" here
Before starting the performance Gaga announced → comma before "Gaga announced"
During the opening for the Lady Gaga and the Muppets' Holiday Spectacular → Remove overfluous "the"
coiffured high and wearing a → coiffured high alongside wearing a
Gaga also the song on Japanese → The word "sang" is missing in this sentence
The song was included on → alternate with "the track"
described it: "Gaga did 'Venus' → : to ,

Credits and personnel

Unlink Artpop and Lady Gaga here

Charts

flawless ;)

Other stuff

Copy-violation

41.5% is slightly too much! Please look for the first source at the top of the list and reduce the content from it in the article's body

Images and others

Images perfectly illustrate the article

Links

1 little problem here! Please fix!

References

Please avoid WP:SHOUTING in several refs!!
- If you are referring to the capitalization of ARTPOP, then that does not come under shouting. Media denotes the album name as ARTPOP only. We at Wikipedia remove that stylization. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 14:42, 25 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article.
No dead links! Good job!

Outcome

On hold for 7 days! Good job with the article!! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:02, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Cartoon network freak: all done! —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 14:42, 25 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  - Passing! Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:09, 25 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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