Talk:Vance Drummond/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 10:15, 10 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I will take this one, comments to follow in a few days. Zawed (talk) 10:15, 10 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I was kind of hoping you'd come to this party, tks mate! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 10:20, 10 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

OK, have looked this over and only have a few nitpicky comments:

Infobox

For the RNZAF, his service ended in 1945, not 1946 (according to the body).
- Tks, done.

Early career and Korean War

I think his service in Korea warrants it being in a standalone section. Possibly his early RAAF career as well?
- Yes, I'm not wed to the section contents (or titles) as they are but I think we'd end up with a few single-paragraph sections otherwise, and as they are they seem to work in conjunction with the images we have. As I said on Talk, before ACR I'll head to the library and see if I can garner further details and see where we come out.
  - For now, had a go dividing the first section into NZ service and early RAAF service + Korea; also tweaked section titles so let me know what you think. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 12:58, 21 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
    - Hi Zawed, didn't stop there, broke Vietnam out into own section (which to be fair I'd considered for a while), added a couple of snippets and an image -- I think that'll do for now so back to you when you're ready... :-) Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 00:33, 22 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

References

Gillespie. "The Pacific" is the title, and the "Official..." is the series. That's how I've been presenting it at least!
The URLs for Going Solo and Strategy and Red Ink don't work
- Fixed all these I think.

Other stuff

Images: the tags all check out OK
No dablinks
No dupe links
Other than the Hurst and Stephen links mentioned above, Checklinks tool doesn't indicate any problems.

Great work as always Ian. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:06, 21 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks Zawed. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 12:10, 21 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, while we're here, what's your thought on the cats being "Australian" DFC recipients and so on? I figured since he received them during his RAAF service that's how it should be but if you've seen it done differently (maybe leaving out the nationality entirely) be interested to know. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 12:31, 21 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

This is all looking great, am satisfied the article meets the GA criteria so am passing now. RE the cats, I think they are fine. If he had a stronger connection to NZ (Drummond is from my hometown but I've never heard of him until this article) I may think differently, but as you note, the awards were received during his service with the RAAF. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:58, 25 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Okay thanks for that -- and of course the review in general! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 10:07, 25 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]