Talk:Vajroli mudra/GA1
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 04:02, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
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[edit]In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use Done, Fixed, Added, Not done, Doing..., or Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. —♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:02, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
- Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 06:16, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
Prose
[edit]The first sentence of the lead is just copy-pasted into "Mudra" in the same position.
- Noted. It seems reasonable that this brief summary should be there also.
It is described in the Hatha Yoga Pradipika 3.82–89.
No citation given. Could you add the description, too?
- That is a citation, and the paragraph already describes it. Added it to the list of references.
- Still needs an in-line citation for verifiability. –Vami
- I added one.
- Still needs an in-line citation for verifiability. –Vami
- That is a citation, and the paragraph already describes it. Added it to the list of references.
In "Reception", there are many, many redundant citations within paragraphs with only a single given citation. The major culprits are citations [2], [6], and [10].
- I've removed repeated citations except where needed to support direct "..." quotations.
Could Hatha Yoga be discussed some, since Vajroli mudra is nested in it, and the topic is derided asas unscientific and dangerous
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- Good point. Added in Context section.
- What is hatha yoga? What is distinct about it? Looking for that sort of information, put succinctly. –Vami
- Added similarities and differences.
- What is hatha yoga? What is distinct about it? Looking for that sort of information, put succinctly. –Vami
- Good point. Added in Context section.
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