Talk:Up Out My Face/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 01:19, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

I willl take a look at this, make straightforward copyedits as I go (please revert if I accidentally change the meaning!) and jot questions below: Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 01:19, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

• Ref 9 (the Eminem book) needs an ISBN number
  • Added.  — Calvin999
• Ref 25 - can we get a date on it?
  • There isn't one.  — Calvin999
• Earwigs is ok

• Copyright 2009 Rye Songs which is administered by Songs of Universal (BMI)/WB Music Publishing (ASCAP/Songs of Peer/March 9 Publishing (ASCAP). - is this a sentence? It has no verb in the main clause...
  • I've made it into a more complete sentence.  — Calvin999
• A club music song which lasts for three minutes, forty-one seconds, its instrumentation makes use of a "thumping" marching band coda - problem here is the change of subject from "song" to "instrumentation". Needs a rejig to align subjects. (watch what I do and see if you like it.) - like this
  • Thanks.  — Calvin999 08:26, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

• but Carey has always "vehemently" denied - no need to use and quote this word, use something like "strenuously", "strongly", "firmly", "emphatically" etc.
  • Changed.  — Calvin999 10:13, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

• Surely the last segment of the Production and composition, which is all the folks' views of the lyrics should go in reception?
  • No because they are commenting on the composition.  — Calvin999 10:24, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
    • Fair enough I guess. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:32, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
• I'd add the date of the release of the remix with minaj into the lead, which is a bit short...
  • I have?  — Calvin999 10:25, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

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Pass or Fail: - just waiting on last couple....nearly there Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 10:28, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

Where are the last couple?  — Calvin999 10:34, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

Never mind - I goofed on the lead and explanation for other is fine. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:32, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

Thanks. :)  — Calvin999 11:36, 15 October 2015 (UTC)