Talk:Unfold (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dylan620 (talk · contribs) 18:45, 25 January 2024 (UTC)

Glad to see this song at GAN; I enjoyed Nurture very much upon release, and this was one of my favorite songs from it. Looking forward to reviewing this article! Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 18:45, 25 January 2024 (UTC)

That's great, I'm looking forward to your comments! —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 20:09, 25 January 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Disclosure: I filled in a small part of the fair use rationale for the single cover during the process of this review. Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 19:30, 29 January 2024 (UTC)

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   I'm going to place this on hold to allow for the concerns below to be addressed. Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 19:30, 29 January 2024 (UTC)

Comments

• The song is the only listed collaboration on Nurture [note 1] and Robinson has stated that this was a contributing factor in making the song a callback to his debut album Worlds (2014). — This reads a little run-on-y; maybe replace the "and" with a semicolon?

   Done —TS

• "Unfold" released to general critical acclaim, and a lyric video for the song was released on May 19, 2021. — I'm not sure if these two clauses are sufficiently related to be in the same sentence.

   Rephrased —TS

• That "Wind Tempos" features instrumental contributions from Masakatsu Takagi is not verified by the cited source, although there is a source in the album article that mentions this.

  Good catch! The claim is also verified by the Apple Music description, so I used that instead.  Done. —TS

• There is no source provided regarding "Fullmoon Lullaby".

   Not done as the album is used as the implied primary source here. —TS

  Fair enough. Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 20:33, 29 January 2024 (UTC)

• The NME source does not validate the material it cites; did you mean to cite this instead?

  Whoops, looks like I got those Ben Jolley / NME sources mixed up!  Done. —TS

• David Klemow feels — the verb tense here is inconsistent with the cited critic opinions throughout the rest of the article.

   Done —TS

• The same sentence containing the above clause could probably be split in half; it feels a bit like a run-on as is.

   Done —TS

• Robinson made the decision to move it towards the conclusion of the record — maybe mention that he had originally wanted to place the song near the front?

   Done —TS

My current thinking is that this article is close to meeting the criteria, but not quite there just yet. Putting on hold. Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 19:30, 29 January 2024 (UTC)

@Dylan620: Thanks for your review! I've addressed your comments above. —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 20:00, 29 January 2024 (UTC)

@TechnoSquirrel69: No prob! I'm satisfied, good work. Passing. Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 20:33, 29 January 2024 (UTC)